Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child. Of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes has the most intensive program, and our teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. Many of our students have gone on to become professional dancers with top dance companies.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The argument states that Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child. To bolster its claim the author of above argument states that of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes Ballet School has the most intensive program and their teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet company all over the world. Many of their students have gone on to become professional dancers with top dance companies. The given argument is rendered ineffective since some important questions have left unanswered. The same seriously undermines the credibility of the argument.
To begin with we need cogent answer to the question that Pirouettes Ballet School really have the most intensive program among all the dance schools in Elmtown. No data or comparative study with other schools program is mentioned in above argument which can bolster this claim made by Pirouettes Ballet School and absence of which belies its claim for example it might be possible that Pirouettes Ballet School do not have most intensive program in the Elmtown when a comparative study is done on the programs of dance schools in Elmtown. Therefore, author of above argument should provided us the data which can bolster the claim that Pirouettes Ballet School has most intensive program among all dance schools in Elmtown.
Additionally, we need cogent answer to the question that whether all teacher have danced in most prestigious ballet companies all over the world or just a few of them. As no evidence is provided which corroborate that Pirouettes Ballet School has all teachers who have danced in the prestigious companies all over the world for example, it might be possible that Pirouettes Ballet School has only a few teachers not all who have danced in the most prestigious companies, if this is the case then to claim to be best ballet school in Elmtown would be rendered as a baseless claim made in the above argument.
Further more, we need cogent answer to the question that why Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child ? Since the claims given to answer this question are clearly not enough to answer this question. Above argument does not provide enough data to bolster the claim that Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child which includes data regarding success ratio, number of students intake in the professional top dance companies for example, it might be possible that only a few students of Pirouettes Ballet School have gone on to become professional dancers with top companies, if this is the case then Pirouettes Ballet School is not a clear choice for any child in Elmtown to learn dance.
Therefore, it can be concluded that by ignoring the answers of the question like the one mentioned above, the argument exposes its inherent fallacies. One needs cogent answers to the questions posed above, the same seriously undermines the merit of argument. Thus, we reject this argument in totality.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 14 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 488 350
No. of Characters: 2418 1500
No. of Different Words: 154 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.7 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.955 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.491 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 184 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 124 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 87 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.706 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 23.574 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.412 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.402 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.604 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.208 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 184, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hools in Elmtown. No data or comparative study with other schools program is ment...
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Line 5, column 509, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'be the best'.
Suggestion: be the best
...s, if this is the case then to claim to be best ballet school in Elmtown would be rende...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 123, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ool is the clear choice for any child ? Since the claims given to answer this questio...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 715, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to dance'
Suggestion: to dance
...hoice for any child in Elmtown to learn dance. Therefore, it can be concluded that...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, really, regarding, so, then, therefore, thus, for example, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 20.0 13.6137724551 147% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 55.5748502994 119% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2467.0 2260.96107784 109% => OK
No of words: 488.0 441.139720559 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05532786885 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70007681154 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55491499546 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 204.123752495 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.321721311475 0.468620217663 69% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 748.8 705.55239521 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 22.8473053892 131% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 134.380973704 57.8364921388 232% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 154.1875 119.503703932 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.5 23.324526521 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.75 5.70786347227 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.580341999932 0.218282227539 266% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.232651292582 0.0743258471296 313% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.19557064419 0.0701772020484 279% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.375521682045 0.128457276422 292% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.199381298301 0.0628817314937 317% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 14.3799401198 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.66 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.26 8.32208582834 87% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 98.500998004 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.1389221557 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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