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A musician becomes famous after he dies,

Fame is usually refered to as the status of being well-known as a result of certain skills one possess. Over the decades, talent and skills has been known to surface in different capacities, most especially in the area of music. Musician have been to tend towards a particular genre to which they skilled at. The prompts addressed this issue by proposing that being famous could be detrimental to candid assessment of growth and development in one's ability to improve musically, unless the person is dead. However, I mostly disagree with this opinion for two reasons, which i would elucidate below, but i do concede that the music from time past have had relevance and true appreciation by geniuses in music.
To begin, in most cases, assessment generally, regardless of the field, is necessary for growth. Certain tools are usually employed to assess talents in musics. For instance, Handel, who is known for his prowess in classical music would have encountered critics who gave their concerns to his style of music in the Baroque era. If he had allowed public appeal to affect his emotions and judgement in his music, maybe he would not have be the "genius", we have known him to be. In addition, the only indication that one grows and develop over time is when there is platform of assessing the musical skills, which covers a whole range from voice, drumming, piano playing, violin and saxophone, among others. This shows that quality assessment can not be overemphasized.

In addition, generally, being famous for a musical skilll is an indication that such talents is well appreciated. One may not imagine the amount of work that must have put to ensure that their ability has been recognized publicly. For example, Katherine Jenkins is a well-known classical singer, particularly a lyic soprano, who has be so celebrated to her talent in music. She has been , for years, been invited for concerts for a very long time, even at National openings. If she had allowed the critics to deter her from becoming great, we would not have celebrated her , or be seen as role model for upcoming soprano singers.

Admittedly, like say, some argue that most music works have been appreciated when the are long gone, but i do butress that talent and musical skills of renowned musicians for them to improve in their career, most importantly, would require coaches or mentors that guide and give candid assessment of their musical ability and talents.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, well, for example, for instance, in addition, as a result, in most cases

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2048.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 412.0 442.535393258 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97087378641 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70869354129 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 215.323595506 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538834951456 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 645.3 704.065955056 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.7444125676 60.3974514979 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.470588235 118.986275619 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2352941176 23.4991977007 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.82352941176 5.21951772744 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0568142262847 0.243740707755 23% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0190851041597 0.0831039109588 23% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0273984304132 0.0758088955206 36% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0362289848901 0.150359130593 24% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00432051970752 0.0667264976115 6% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 100.480337079 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.

It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, well, for example, for instance, in addition, as a result, in most cases

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this: