A nation should require all of it students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position
Should nation compel its all students to take the same nation-made course? Albeit it has some merits, I find this recommendation assumes vulnerable hypothesis and fails to account for a possible caveat of missing students' talents. Thus I acknowledge the merit of the recommendation insofar as it is applied to teaching basic skills to potential citizens though, I fundamentally disagree to the recommendation.
It is hard for many people to deny that the recommendation has a merit for embedding basic skills to live society in its entire citizens. Consider how reading and writing, which is necessary to complain one's own right, helps people. If you can not read and write, you may have difficult to participate to an election, which is one's political right. Unable to read and write would also be problematic to get advanced education and get various information. Definitely, reading and writing is the most elementary and indispensable skill to live society. Therefore to enable its citizens act healthfully, all students would be needed to take a basic national curriculum.
However, the above scenario is confined to the case of teaching basic skills only. The original recommendation is underlying an critical assumption: the national curriculum would be the best way to develop all kinds of talents and students. This assumption is false because every student have different level of talent and different speed of learning, a student needs a meticulous education that is adjusted with consideration of the student. The following example aptly illustrates this point. Think about educating talented students in cage of monolithic national curriculum. The students might not be able to blossom their specific talent-though they might accomplish homework faster than their friends-and it results in enormous damage to the whole nation's competency! Nevertheless, some might argue that rather this can be an exemplary case depicting the greatness of national curriculum, arguing that nation can make the best course by using its authority. Yet, private school is more likely to achieve the blossom of gifted students more fruitfully. It is practically impossible to accommodate all level of students and all kinds of talents that each student has in monolithic curriculum. That is, the counterargument is irrelevant to my intention to suggesting the example and never does it weaken the justness of the example. Thus still there's no problem for the example of flourishing students' talents to substantiate my view.
In sum, the speaker oversimplified the matter by lured to the merit of embedding fundamental knowledge to its potential citizens. As a result, I feel onerous in agreeing the recommendation unless the speaker obviates the possible caveat of missing invaluable talents of the students.
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...the justness of the example. Thus still theres no problem for the example of flourishi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, thus, i feel, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2371.0 2235.4752809 106% => OK
No of words: 439.0 442.535393258 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.40091116173 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13287131146 2.79657885939 112% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526195899772 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 746.1 704.065955056 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.7646219133 60.3974514979 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.904761905 118.986275619 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9047619048 23.4991977007 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.04761904762 5.21951772744 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241690478161 0.243740707755 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0660213455599 0.0831039109588 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0610091501098 0.0758088955206 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13188564783 0.150359130593 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0590576707005 0.0667264976115 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.04 12.1639044944 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 100.480337079 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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