A nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college rather than allow schools in different parts of the nation to determine which academic courses to offer.
The author emphasises on to have a common curriculum for all students in a country until school and after graduating from school, then there should be different syllabus for students. I also agree with the recommendation of the author to some extent, I do not fully agree with writer's comment. In the following few paragraphs, I will put forward my opinions on the comment of the writer.
I agree that there should be some similarities in the curriculum of school level in a country. Because every country has it's own norms, cultures, history, languages etc. and every citizens of a country should know these identities. Otherwise the nation will not be able to fulfil it's dream. But at the some time, there are some differences among the citizens of a country also. For example, there are almost more than 200 ethnic groups live in Bangladesh. These ethnic groups have there own cultures, norms, values, festivals which is totally different from the other people of Bangladesh. The future generations of these ethnic groups should also know their own cultures. We know that for learning, children life is the best part of our life. So, every children should learn these things in their childhood and we are well aware that for the developing countries like Bangladesh schools are the best teacher for children. Because most of the parents remain busy with their for maintaining their livelihood. They have very few time to take care of their children. These children learn the things whatever their school teacher teaches. These teachers follow the curriculum to teach their students. Thats why these syllabus must contain something about their own culture otherwise they were not be able to know about their own cultures and if this things happen then these rich cultures will be on the verge of extinct.
At the same time, there should be also some similarities in the curriculum at school level of a country. Because for a third world kind country like Bangladesh, we have very few opportunities for employment. The job market is very competitive. Every year a large number of students are graduating from diverge field of education and competing for same post. The trend shows that in these competitive examination, the students having background in mathematics, finance, accounting, economics are getting competitive advantage due to their strong background in mathematics. The students from social sciences, humanities are not getting selected in these few posts. That's why I also support to some extent that there should be some similarities in curriculum at school level of a country.
Finally, I recommend to have a blend of some common and few specialties for a certain region in the national curriculum for the children of school level of a country. This blend will purpose the serve of having some common knowledge as well as the awareness of their own cultures of different group of people and only then we will get a strong future generation who will lead our country to higher position.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Otherwise,
...a country should know these identities. Otherwise the nation will not be able to fulfil i...
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...be able to fulfil its dream. But at the some time, there are some differences among ...
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...erences among the citizens of a country also. For example, there are almost more tha...
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...in Bangladesh. These ethnic groups have there own cultures, norms, values, festivals whic...
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...aining their livelihood. They have very few time to take care of their children. These c...
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...the curriculum to teach their students. Thats why these syllabus must contain somethi...
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...urriculum at school level of a country. Finally, I recommend to have a blend of ...
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...chool level of a country. Finally, I recommend to have a blend of some common and few specialt...
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...up of people and only then we will get a strong future generation who will lead o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, so, then, third, well, for example, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 33.0505617978 136% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 58.6224719101 113% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2506.0 2235.4752809 112% => OK
No of words: 500.0 442.535393258 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.012 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72870804502 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69295376863 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 215.323595506 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.426 0.4932671777 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 774.0 704.065955056 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 53.9078113653 60.3974514979 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.8148148148 118.986275619 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5185185185 23.4991977007 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.59259259259 5.21951772744 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 7.80617977528 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.83258426966 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137944762561 0.243740707755 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0437271982835 0.0831039109588 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0437583439421 0.0758088955206 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0910957542127 0.150359130593 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0113933235065 0.0667264976115 17% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.38706741573 86% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 100.480337079 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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