A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Although education is very important to shape the career of a person, I beg to differ that all of the students should study the same national curriculum until they enter college. It is well known that every person has his own talents and aptitudes to a specific field. I believe that if we were able to figure out and foster those abilities in a child, it would help him/her contribute to a greater extent in his/her field of passion. This way, a person can benefit more to himself and to the country.
Each person is born with different inherent abilities of his own. They find passion and fun in their own field of interest. Opportunities should be provided to bring out more aid in those sector than obliging them to having to study something mundane and trivial. A child who is instilled with knowledge of his field can later become a connoisseur of the field. Such brilliant mind helps country progress a lot if specially in the filed of technology, medicine, politics.
On the other hand, even children who did not get to study have become an expert in a field. It is not meant to say that the curriculum developed is incompetent and should not be exercised at all. But a greater emphasis is on the issue that it kills the enthusiasm in the student. Not only being forced to study something one has no interest in kills the enthusiasm of student, but also demotivates him/her from attending school at all. The student performance may be below average as his study is a perfunctory. In worst case, it may cause a mental health complications in students.
In conclusion, for personal development and of a country as a whole, we should not force students to study predetermined curriculum against their will but should help them bring out their inner talent. Those talents actually makes a difference in their lives. Students are at the prime of their learning phase and if we could utilize it in a proper way, it can benefit a lot. Also, it helps students prosper in life and embrace happiness as they are pursuing the area of their interest and not working to earn a living under various obligations.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 92, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...areer of a person, I beg to differ that all of the students should study the same national...
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Line 3, column 183, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this sector' or 'those sectors'?
Suggestion: this sector; those sectors
...ld be provided to bring out more aid in those sector than obliging them to having to study s...
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Line 5, column 498, Rule ID: DT_JJ_NO_NOUN[1]
Message: Probably a noun is missing in this part of the sentence.
...ce may be below average as his study is a perfunctory. In worst case, it may cause a mental h...
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Line 5, column 513, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'In the worst'.
Suggestion: In the worst
... average as his study is a perfunctory. In worst case, it may cause a mental health comp...
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Line 7, column 338, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a proper way" with adverb for "proper"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...arning phase and if we could utilize it in a proper way, it can benefit a lot. Also, it helps s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, if, may, so, still, thus, well, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 33.0505617978 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1743.0 2235.4752809 78% => OK
No of words: 372.0 442.535393258 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68548387097 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66915179685 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.529569892473 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 547.2 704.065955056 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.8022501604 60.3974514979 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.7368421053 118.986275619 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5789473684 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.47368421053 5.21951772744 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24375635854 0.243740707755 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0676661514386 0.0831039109588 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117405838412 0.0758088955206 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141288401223 0.150359130593 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0725121938512 0.0667264976115 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 14.1392134831 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 12.1639044944 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 100.480337079 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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