A nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college rather than allow schools in different parts of the nation to determine which academic courses to offer.
No one can gainsay that the education system is one of the fundementals of a country to develop its economy and produce competent people. In this sense, some people are in the position that we should not standardize the curriculum of schools prior to university courses, as it can diminish the potential for givng students creativity and chance to experience various subjects. However, not everyone agrees on such position: in fact, there are multifaceted advantages in providing the same curriculum for students, such as bringing up academically excellent students but also increasing school administration.
First and foremost, there are some people who argue that the standardized school curriculum may cause to decrease creative mind and thinking in students. If a class is focused on following a same curriculum, teachers would not be able to come up with more creative course works that can help students develop the understanding of a course. As a vivid example, many students would have had lucid understanding about historical incidents, arts, if they had visited the historical place such as musuems, galleries, rather than reading the fact about them in the book. In addition, the school courses would be less diversified because of standardized curriculum, and most class may be concentrated on major subjects such as maths, history, science, literature and so forth. However, this would inevitably limit the chance that students explore other minor subjects like music, arts, exercises, which some of them may have latent abilities to excell in that areas. Some genius may miss chance to develop thier hidden talent under this standardized system. For example, Thomas Edison was expelled from the school, due to the inability to find out his potential in resaerch by his school and teacher. Likewise, some people assert that we should try to diversify school works and make flexible curriculums.
However, what was alluded to above should not be overgeneralized to all context. Alongside those negative sides, there are certainly advantageous asepcts in the standardized schooling system. First of all, this system would encourge the rigorous education environment, as students all need to compete with each other for the same course, it will help them improve their academic performance. More students would be prompted to study even difficult subjects such as advanced math, as their friends are all studying the same thing to get the high score. Another reason of the argument can be that the same curriculum facilitate the efficiency of the school administration such as student evaluation, students' moving etc. Because all students take the same exams, and the evaluation of them are much easier, but also students are able to move thier place easily without being fraught with keeping up with the new environment in the new place. For example, students moved from Seoul to Busan in South Korea would not have any quandary to adjust to new lectures and teachers, because they all use the same course materials. As seen from those examples, the uniform education system can produce various benefits to students as well as schools.
To sum up, there is no denying the fact that students would not have highly creative and diversified course works to experience new areas of study in the standardized education system. However, the advantages of the system override those negative sides, as it can promote rigorous environment to make students more intelligible and smart but also facilitate the education administration. Therefore, we need to develop the best version of the national education system from which both of students and schools can benefit.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 103, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'decreasing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'cause' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: decreasing
...tandardized school curriculum may cause to decrease creative mind and thinking in students....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, likewise, may, so, therefore, well, for example, in addition, in fact, such as, as well as, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 25.0 12.4196629213 201% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 58.6224719101 128% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3093.0 2235.4752809 138% => OK
No of words: 586.0 442.535393258 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27815699659 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.92010537223 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82724749574 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 273.0 215.323595506 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.465870307167 0.4932671777 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 972.9 704.065955056 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.10617977528 322% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.7864473434 60.3974514979 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.590909091 118.986275619 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6363636364 23.4991977007 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.63636363636 5.21951772744 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211504352657 0.243740707755 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0643920149464 0.0831039109588 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0366946717761 0.0758088955206 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130873089848 0.150359130593 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.023316462086 0.0667264976115 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 14.1392134831 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 48.8420337079 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 12.1639044944 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 135.0 100.480337079 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.8971910112 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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