A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
As old adage says, "Students period is a golden period in anyone's life", this is conspicuously true because this period makes students to choose a career path that their whole life will be based upon. Students selecting career choices without provident thoughts are fairly likely to choose next one shortly. The prompt suggests that students, before entering into colleges, should be studying same national curriculum and after high school, they can go to pursue their own. In my opinion, I mostly disagree with this suggestion and argue that rather than making course content ubiquitous, choices should be given to the students as an elective and rather than forcing them to choose one, we must change our conventional methodology so that teaching could be more effective. I will present following reasons to bolster my views.
To begin, most students make up their mind from their early age about career goals. It is fairly normal to change, but most of them gets adhere to their goals and they are likely to succeed. Thus, someone having interest of sports from early ages would find no interest in learning stuffs related to medicines and buildings, thus rather than emphasizing what students' must learn from early age, course content should be assess in a way that simulates their interests. For instance, what if instructors who taught Sachin Tendulkar told him not to do what he loves and rather focus on studying about world politics. The repercussion of those examples would be severe, we won't even have found "God of Cricket", the reputation that is given by world cricket to him. Thus, limiting any people to make learn same curriculum would be harmful for a person who is heretic and wanted to achieve something out of the academic lives.
Secondly, Schools and teaching department must consider factors that motivates the learning process of the students rather than just focusing on the contents. The goal of the schools is to make students aware about the contents and help them to develop the skill by exposing to real world concepts and sensations. For instance, students who learn by simply mugging the facts and figures of environment, geological structures and landscapes won't help them to retract the information for longer duration, rather schools must capture other methodologies of learning. Instead of focusing on contents, they can change some methodology of teaching. In case of history lectures, making students aware about history would be productive by making tour of museums and social heritages. Thus, rather than just making same content for every students which won't be productive; we should focus mainly how to make students to make gain enough information and make them able to think logically and answer critically.
Of course, some might argue that making same content for every students motivates them to choose a path like medical, engineering which pays a lot. They can uplift their career choosing these fields. If students learn about computers from their early ages, they are likely to pursue career in computer science. But, the short pitfall in this argument is job market is always changing. Today's 'hot' job is likely to fade away in the future, or may see slight decline to it. For instance, nuclear engineering was considered one of the prestigious career during world war 1st and 2nd but now due to the diabolical activities happened in Iraq and states, it's worth is slightly decreased. Thus, rather than thinking about the job market and content of knowledge, it should be given priority to students to choose which career path they want to pursue.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 206, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...ey are likely to succeed. Thus, someone having interest of sports from early ages woul...
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Line 3, column 421, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'assessed'?
Suggestion: assessed
...rom early age, course content should be assess in a way that simulates their interests...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, for instance, of course, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 33.0505617978 148% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 81.0 58.6224719101 138% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3034.0 2235.4752809 136% => OK
No of words: 594.0 442.535393258 134% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10774410774 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.93681225224 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5811567277 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 303.0 215.323595506 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510101010101 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 912.6 704.065955056 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.4571708362 60.3974514979 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.416666667 118.986275619 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.75 23.4991977007 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.33333333333 5.21951772744 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.83258426966 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.138408946956 0.243740707755 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0426133516907 0.0831039109588 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.037413513931 0.0758088955206 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0903755246325 0.150359130593 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0234770322153 0.0667264976115 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.1392134831 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.8420337079 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 138.0 100.480337079 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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