a nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
It is hard to define the roles of government because there are many roles and responsibilities that the government should take for citizens. However, providing great environment to educate people and designing a good educational system often produce advantageous factors for the society. Regarding to the educational system, it has been controversial whether education curriculum should offer more freedom to students or be rigid in terms of selecting subjects.
First of all, education should be fair and should be given the equal amount of opportunites to everyone. Therefore, the same national curriculum is necessary for the society and citizens. Otherwise, education could be a great factor that can lead worsen segregation between wealth and poverty in the society. For example, in South Korea in which parents especially are eager to send their children to a good private or privileged schools, there were high schools that were more privileged and most of parents wanted to send their kids. Those high schools had their own curriculums designed in order to send their students to the most privileged colleges eventually. Because of high competitive rates to enter those high school, students who were enough wealthy to be supported from their parents were likely to enter those high schools. These patterns eventually worsen the class difference in South Korea. Therefore, the government decided a few decades ago that all the high school in Korea became public high schools subsidized by the nation and provided the same national curriculum so that students from lower class families can also have the same education from the other from higher socioeconomic class families.
Not only for regulating class differences, but also for satisfying the basic knowledge for citizens, the educational curriculum should be standardized. For example, there are several subjects in primary schools that all the students must take in order to graduate because they are those knowledge that all the citizen should know and be adapted as their basic skills. It was a social issue in South Korea that people who ran out of North Korea to South Korea are not able to find jobs or be accustomed into South Korea because they were properly not educated in terms of basic computer skills or knowing internationally used languages such as English alphabet. Even though this is an extreme example, if there is no standardized curriculums provided by the government, it would be difficult to regulate the society and would not be efficient for citizens later when they move onto the next step in the society.
However, even though some of subjects should be strictly standardized, there should be liberty and freedom in eudcation. Having different opitions and some flexibilities are necessary in education. All the people do not need to have the exact the same education. It should depend on their aptitudes or preferences regarding what they would like to work for careers or what they are more interested in. All the people do not have the same interests and have the same career goals. In order to guide better, the government should research and prepare several options so that students can select one of them. Example, in high school in Korea, there are a couple of selections depending on students' preferences, i.e. social science and science.
Furthermore, giving the exact same curriculum that the government requires can be inefficient for some population. For example, students who want to be a chef do not need to take some of advanced science courses rather need more nutrition knowledge or how to cook. However, if there is a limited number of curriculums required, it would be not fair and inefficient to use their time to develop and explore experience and knowledge.
Therefore, even though students could have another chance to learn more advanced and various knowledge after entering college, the government should design a set of national curriculum that is optimized for students who have different interests and be aware of differences in those career goals of students.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 494, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the parents') or simply say ''most parents''.
Suggestion: most of the parents; most parents
...h schools that were more privileged and most of parents wanted to send their kids. Those high s...
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Line 5, column 282, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this knowledge' or 'those knowledges'?
Suggestion: this knowledge; those knowledges
...e in order to graduate because they are those knowledge that all the citizen should know and be...
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Line 7, column 22, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'some of', you should use 'the' ('some of the subjects') or simply say ''some subjects''.
Suggestion: some of the subjects; some subjects
...n the society. However, even though some of subjects should be strictly standardized, there ...
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Line 7, column 88, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean ''?
... strictly standardized, there should be liberty and freedom in eudcation. Having differ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, regarding, so, therefore, for example, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 37.0 19.5258426966 189% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 25.0 12.4196629213 201% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 27.0 14.8657303371 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 58.6224719101 130% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3435.0 2235.4752809 154% => OK
No of words: 659.0 442.535393258 149% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2124430956 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.06665523852 4.55969084622 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79826217211 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 284.0 215.323595506 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.43095599393 0.4932671777 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1088.1 704.065955056 155% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.9954774532 60.3974514979 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.115384615 118.986275619 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3461538462 23.4991977007 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.21951772744 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235789589742 0.243740707755 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.071963410621 0.0831039109588 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0612405528097 0.0758088955206 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130649785438 0.150359130593 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0489652726565 0.0667264976115 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 14.1392134831 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 48.8420337079 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.1639044944 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 138.0 100.480337079 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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