Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
there are many aspects that human beings have as their inherent temperament and inabilities. one of them is humans are trying to make self-achievement throughout their own lives. thus, many people tend to go develop more skills and move forward which often bring them feeling of satisfaction and higher self-esteem. however, making desirable activities or idea into the reality is not always feasible. thus, people often tend to seek balance between reality and ideality within themselves and others.
As mentioned in author's note, it could be possibly said that those dreams from some people would be selfish when those people would not consider or care about others who sacarify for them and only think about themself and for their own sake. For example, those people who ignore others in order to chase their dream and make achievement only for their benefits would be considered they are selfish. however, as you might notice, not because having dreams to pursue or dream itself is selfish, the moral quality that those kind of people have is selfish and dependent on others taking advantages from what others have. therefore, it would be restricted and narrowing views just to see that dreams of people or having dreams are selfish.
having dreams and goals would be not only beneficial for themselves and others but would make impossibilities possible and open to new world by making dreams possible. steven jobs had viewed by others that he was a stranger who thought about impossible creature, which was a laptop when laptop did not exist. people never thought it would be not possible to have potable computer outside of house and considered steven jobs as a person who chase unrealistic dreams. however, few years later after he worked so hard on developing handy laptop and eventually made it possible that people were able to bring computers anywhere they would want. therefore, now because of the person who thought things that other people never agreed on, people now all over the world can easily access computer even when they are in train, car, plane, or anywhere they like to take it.
chasing dreams have been viewed by psychologists as a healthy way of mental health because self-achievement is one of tempers that humans like to possess. By achieving that, most people feel they are feeling of existence. it is frequently recommended to have a goal or dream for clients in psychotherapy sessions or for elderly who have retired when they have no work to do daytime. there have been many reports that elderly people who have life goals and purpose or something they are dreaming and like to achieve in their lives tend to be psychologically and physically healthy, live longer, and feel less depressed.
Although it is a good idea for people to have dream or dream about things to achieve, people should know how to balance between reality and ideality. If someone have a dream to obtain in bachelor degree from ten colleges, even though it could be possible to study in ten colleges until he receives all the degree, it is hard to be seen that goal is realistic and could be viewed as a pointless life goal. In order to have a good balanced dream or goal between reality and ideality, a person should think about the purpose having that specific dream and imagine what the dream would bring to his life and in the world.
pursuing a life goal and dream could be seen as selfish when the person pursuing would not consider other and only care about him solely because his characteristics are selfish, not because dreaming is selfish. having dream and pursing it would be beneficial for the world and himself. however, dreaming also should follow with some thorough feedback what it would bring or why it would need to pursue balancing out between realistically and idealistically.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, therefore, thus, for example, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 35.0 19.5258426966 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.4196629213 185% => OK
Conjunction : 41.0 14.8657303371 276% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 26.0 11.3162921348 230% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 55.0 33.0505617978 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 58.6224719101 126% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3182.0 2235.4752809 142% => OK
No of words: 644.0 442.535393258 146% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94099378882 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.0375743251 4.55969084622 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55036834381 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 273.0 215.323595506 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.423913043478 0.4932671777 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 981.0 704.065955056 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.989140342 60.3974514979 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.583333333 118.986275619 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8333333333 23.4991977007 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.70833333333 5.21951772744 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 22.0 7.80617977528 282% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186122045133 0.243740707755 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0693176908303 0.0831039109588 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0413797231411 0.0758088955206 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113392527343 0.150359130593 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0303550036764 0.0667264976115 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.8420337079 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 100.480337079 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.