The following appeared in a letter from the faculty committee to the president of Seatown University:
A study conducted at nearby Oceania University showed that faculty retention is higher when professors are offered free tuition at the university for their own college-aged children. Therefore, Seatown should institute a free-tuition policy for its professors for the purpose of enhancing morale among the faculty and luring new professors.
The author alleges in the memorandum that Seatown should provide professors tuition for their children who are in college because they predict it will encourage professors for their work and those professors who receive tuition for their college-aged children stayed at the university longer. However, even though providing tuition to their children of professors would give some merit for potential applicants for the position of professors, there may be other ways and options that potential or current professors like to work at the university.
There may be other services or aspects that are specifically related to why higher number of faculty member stay longer than before such as research fit or amount of salary. Due to the nature of academia, it is important to find a position where potential applicants can do their research that they like to pursue. There also might be a well-organized welfare system for faculty member at the University such as well-paid salary or great medical insurance program provided by school. There are many other options that could be considered as related to higher retention for employees in working settings. However, the author only mentions only one factor, i.e., free tuition for faculties' children, and it would be doubtful that free tuition would be the answer in order to locate professors who would work longer or attract more intelligent professor.
Even though a free tuition is a considerable benefit for professors when they choose a position, there may be a number of professors who do not have kids at all or have children who are much younger than those who are about to enter college. In that case, a free tuition policy would not be attracting for them. Therefore, the author should consider the difference between Oceania University and Seatown University in order to conceive whether the policy would significantly affect and have the same effect from what Oceania college had as reported.
It should be considered any cost benefits or loss by providing a free tuition policy because there may other ways to spend the same amount of money in order to locate more intelligent professors or keep them longer in the university. Also, the author should consider the financial situation at Seatown comparing to Oceania university because tuition for education is not inexpensive and Oceania university has much more asset than Seatown has so that they have enough money to provide professors for their children's tuition. Therefore, with the limited finance, the author should considerate what options would be available to lost intelligent professors at their college and provide them better quality of environment where they can work and generate efficient quality of work in their research/teaching field.
The author should not only cleearly show what path he used to collect the data and result but should consider other related options that might affect the decisions of employee to stay at their work and when they choose positions.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- not exactly. need to argue:
Therefore, Seatown should institute a free-tuition policy for its professors for the purpose of enhancing morale among the faculty and luring new professors.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 486 350
No. of Characters: 2479 1500
No. of Different Words: 199 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.695 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.101 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.621 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 197 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 147 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 89 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 62 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 34.714 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.974 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.386 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.614 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.161 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 12.9520958084 185% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 11.1786427146 170% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2526.0 2260.96107784 112% => OK
No of words: 484.0 441.139720559 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21900826446 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69041575982 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7097924656 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.415289256198 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 793.8 705.55239521 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 22.8473053892 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.9419967758 57.8364921388 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 180.428571429 119.503703932 151% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.5714285714 23.324526521 148% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.07142857143 5.70786347227 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 6.88822355289 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268005632163 0.218282227539 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108451961955 0.0743258471296 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0606779087126 0.0701772020484 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166179043683 0.128457276422 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0503372334701 0.0628817314937 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.4 14.3799401198 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.97 48.3550499002 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 12.197005988 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.59 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 98.500998004 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 12.3882235529 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 11.1389221557 140% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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