"A nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college rather than allow schools in different parts of the nation to determine which academic courses to offer
This issue raises the controversial issue of whether the curriculum should be the same for all the students or not. Indisputably, the same national curriculum will help in the decrease in discrimination. However, Education institution should be given a right to make a curriculum according to their own requirements as well as the quality of students. In Ireland, an education institution may customise its curriculum. Thus, I do not assert this context.
Most conspicuously, Same national curriculum decreases the competition among the students as well as the schools. Let us look at the instance of the United States of America schools, where states and the federal government gives a right to School to change their curriculum according to their own requirement. This is one of the reasons for quality education. So quality education depends upon the curriculum.
Besides, the success of an educational institution depends upon the curriculum they provide to their students. Let us look at the example of Liberty High School in Ireland, it is a prestigious school as it provides customise curriculum according to its students. thus, customisation in the study helps the students most.
In conclusion, Education helps us to achieve their individual goal and this can not be possible through the educational institution. As per Mr. Morgan, a professor of dalhuoise university, "it's the curriculum which decides the quality of the school." if the students want to get success then they should choose schools according to their curriculum
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, however, if, look, may, so, then, thus, well, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 19.5258426966 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 14.8657303371 20% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.3162921348 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 58.6224719101 53% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1332.0 2235.4752809 60% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 243.0 442.535393258 55% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.48148148148 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94822203886 4.55969084622 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20997150857 2.79657885939 115% => OK
Unique words: 120.0 215.323595506 56% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.493827160494 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 408.6 704.065955056 58% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 55.4149467791 60.3974514979 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.1428571429 118.986275619 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3571428571 23.4991977007 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.71428571429 5.21951772744 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213226820376 0.243740707755 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0792012559993 0.0831039109588 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.064500708481 0.0758088955206 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138983030341 0.150359130593 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0304039301919 0.0667264976115 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 12.1639044944 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 100.480337079 53% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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