Nations should suspend government funding for the arts when significant numbers of their citizens are hungry or unemployed.
Every nation is responsible for the well being of its people. Like in the definition of democracy which states, it is for the people and by the people; the profound nature of nation is to serve its citizen and the history it holds. In the other hand, arts are another dimension which blemishes the cultural depth, protecting the history and paving a way for the future. In the prompt it mentions that, apart from cultural dignity, a nation’s primal issue must be the people and their welfare and I completely agree with this statement providing following examples.
First of all, a nation which struggles with hunger and unemployment is the one that is hit in economic terms; financially weaken and rely heavily on foreign aid. Such a nation should focus in abating the troubles of people rather than waxing the arts. For example, a country like Somalis where hundreds of people die just because of hunger, should not be funding for arts, instead their primal concern should be replete the food store for today and for days to come. It will be imprudent of a nation to ignore the significant population’s harshness and indulge it own self interest rather than the peoples’.
Similarly, a country will move ahead only if its citizens are self sufficient. A country with higher unemployment rate and challenging economy will always stuck in the process of import and financial crisis. For a small country like Nepal, where unemployment rate is at peak and peoples’ daily life is getting worse with each passing day, it’s the primal duty of the nation to assuage this crisis. As the people themselves is their main source of income through heavy taxation; unemployment will not vender much for what a government expects from its people. Therefore, the funding which can be used to generate employment facilities should be used wisely as what is invested will return in time through various means and also that need of time must be addressed. As the challenged faced by a nation differ with time and circumstances. For example, during a disaster the primal concern of the nation is to save the soul of the people. Similarly, during the time of recession, it’s their job to create new one or support the existing. Government should work on the primary and necessary matter instead of pondering in trifling matters. When a need comes of investing in arts, the thing should be done with decency, but when it come for peoples’ struggle and concern, they should always focus on those matters.
To sum up, a nation exists when its peoples’ exist and as people are responsible towards its nation so is the nation towards its people. Therefore, they must address the peoples’ problem before seeing the other matters as people are the primal assets of a country.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: owns
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Message: Did you mean 'comes'?
Suggestion: comes
...hould be done with decency, but when it come for peoples’ struggle and concern, they...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, similarly, so, therefore, well, apart from, for example, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2303.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 470.0 442.535393258 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59236351116 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 215.323595506 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487234042553 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 702.0 704.065955056 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.2646385162 60.3974514979 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.15 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5 23.4991977007 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1 5.21951772744 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277017007715 0.243740707755 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0831514496321 0.0831039109588 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0425683781786 0.0758088955206 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167194783201 0.150359130593 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0597516249826 0.0667264976115 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.1392134831 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 100.480337079 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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