As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.
Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Technology has made a lot of changes in the world we live in now. It is evident when you compare years back and now. The proliferation of electronic gadgets, the convenience they come with and the sophistication it makes our lives. Technology for no doubt has done a lot of good and that does not mean it has not done any bad at all - it has but the good outweighs the bad. I do not agree to the assertion that the ability of humans to think will deteriorate.
First of all, for more than one reason, technology teaches us every day and we tend to learn consciously and unconsciously. New things keep coming up, our way of life keep changing and the only option is to get the know-how and then move on from there. Compare the use of ATM machines to going to the bank; this is a technology almost everyone knows how to use and it was by learning. Consider the use of the internet to search for information; it was by learning. Not to talk of the benefits it comes with when it comes to knowledge, sharing ideas and getting the know-how of simple tasks. Today people study and school online and this does not deteriorate humans to think, but does the opposite.
Also, due to technology and conversely the sharing of innovative ideas, cure for a lot of diseases have been realised. The diseases we used to hear in the earlier years that were killing thousands of people are not heard of today. In Africa, due to the climate, malaria was a killer disease that was caused by the parasite of female anopheles mosquito. Hardly will you hear that someone died of malaria today. In the past years also, mortality rate for babies was high due to the six killer baby diseases but today because of immunizations and vaccines, babies are healthy. This does not end there; as time goes on, the advent of technology allows humans to do more research to look into diseases that keep coming up.
Additionally, technology has made our lives better; we carry out tasks effectively, efficiently, and conveniently. Our everyday lives are filled with the use of technology which makes are lives much better than it was years ago. And all these require the use of the brain to carry them out. A general outlook of a day in a person’s life today will include the use of an alarm to wake up on time, the use of electricity to heat water either for taking shower or taking breakfast, calling a relative or friend with a cell phone, travelling or moving about in an automobile, listening or reading something on the internet, just to mention a few. When we move out of the general life, we use GPS today for navigating, we entertain ourselves with electronic gadgets etc.
However, someone may argue that technology has made us lazy and unhealthy but that is countered by the new cures and solutions that come up each day. One may also say that technology has taken over jobs from humans but that is also countered by humans learning everyday to do things differently, efficiently and effectively. Another person will argue that our lives have become complex but it is a fact that our lives have also gotten better and convenient. If some other person says it is difficult to keep up with the world today, it goes back to the point that we are forced to learn everyday which in no way deteriorate our thinking.
Technology has its pros and cons but I know and believe technology has come to stay and there’s no way the thinking of humans is deteriorating with this fast pace of creativity and innovation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ot mean it has not done any bad at all - it has but the good outweighs the bad. I...
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Suggestion: ATMs
... move on from there. Compare the use of ATM machines to going to the bank; this is a technol...
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Suggestion: our
...ogy has made our lives better; we carry out tasks effectively, efficiently, and con...
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Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...at is also countered by humans learning everyday to do things differently, efficiently a...
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Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...o the point that we are forced to learn everyday which in no way deteriorate our thinkin...
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Suggestion:
...fast pace of creativity and innovation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, first, however, if, look, may, so, then, no doubt, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 34.0 14.8657303371 229% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 33.0505617978 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 91.0 58.6224719101 155% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2868.0 2235.4752809 128% => OK
No of words: 626.0 442.535393258 141% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.58146964856 5.05705443957 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.00199880112 4.55969084622 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64269076381 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 288.0 215.323595506 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.460063897764 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 931.5 704.065955056 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.464630978 60.3974514979 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.222222222 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1851851852 23.4991977007 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.18518518519 5.21951772744 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193531731152 0.243740707755 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0554801473779 0.0831039109588 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0486325197391 0.0758088955206 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105448415606 0.150359130593 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0315468373765 0.0667264976115 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.58 12.1639044944 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 100.480337079 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.