As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.
Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The topic provided in itself seems to be quite vague as it seems like I am asked to predict the future direction of humanity alongside technology. There are plethora of path available for humans to lead their technological advances. For example: If major part of technology goes into hands of evil-minded people then they might use it for destruction purposes rather than making technological advances in positive direction or, if technology gets controlled by wise human beings then that might lead us to correct direction.
This vaguely described question will have many possible conditions. The ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate but only if we humans let it to. Right now, we have the control of technologies in our own control but the day we human lose our cognitive ability might not be far away if we continue to be careless with available technologies. I myself being a millenial, to some extent, I feel like I am having a overdose of technology beyond certain limit which in one way or another might be deteriorating my ability to think for myself.
In such a vast topic, we need to have as many perspective as possible so that we can get a clearer picture of what the future of technology might look like and how it can hamper human evolution. Looking at the positive aspect, there are many humans using the technology to their optimal advantage without letting it deteriorate themselves in any way be it time utilisation or thinking ability. These wise people are taking technology in the right direction as well as influencing people who are using technology against themselves be it knowingly or unknowingly.
So, the final answer of this argument boils down to one word answer, perspective. It is all about how we see the technological direction in the near future. But, I think it will hamper humans ability to think for themselves but in very less quantity because people are being able to expand wide array of knowledge in themselves with the help of tchnologies which may actually give them even more ability to think for themselves.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 435, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...to some extent, I feel like I am having a overdose of technology beyond certain l...
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Line 9, column 42, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun perspective seems to be countable; consider using: 'many perspectives'.
Suggestion: many perspectives
...n such a vast topic, we need to have as many perspective as possible so that we can get a cleare...
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Line 13, column 228, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mans ability to think for themselves but in very less quantity because people are...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, if, look, may, so, then, well, for example, i feel, i think, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 33.0505617978 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1750.0 2235.4752809 78% => OK
No of words: 354.0 442.535393258 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94350282486 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85255910155 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 215.323595506 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.542372881356 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 576.9 704.065955056 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.4040093019 60.3974514979 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.615384615 118.986275619 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2307692308 23.4991977007 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.61538461538 5.21951772744 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271041199592 0.243740707755 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102568533767 0.0831039109588 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0875590010452 0.0758088955206 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176506741623 0.150359130593 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0449079818805 0.0667264976115 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.1392134831 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 100.480337079 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.