As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.
Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Living in a globalized and highly technological world as the present one is something which should be taken seriously in its implications on our everyday life. Today we can find answers to virtually any question online - a cooking recipe, a major illness problem, a math problem or the next Image Dragons album - by simply "googling" it. We are constantly connected, and distances in terms of space and time seem to have been overcome, making reaching the other part of the world a matter of seconds. Technology seems to offer us unlimited possibilities, but what it cannot give us - for now, at least - is the ability of an automatic critical thinking.
Personally, I do not completely agree with the presented claim, even though it holds some truth. In fact, it is undeniable that nowadays we tend to rely more and more on technology in the attempt to find a quick and clear solution to our problems. Today more and more youngsters believe that internet holds all the answers and that they are always easy to reach. Unfortunately, we often see emarginated or introvert people creating some sort of online parallel life, trying to heal their social inadequacy and believing to have found a simple, rewarding solution. Or again, more trivially, how many times did we surf the Internet to answer silly questions, to be updated about global news or to find a faster way to do something? However, the point is that the Internet can only provide us with notions, with practical and concrete knowledge at the moment, or with an illusion of interpersonal and social interaction. If we are struggling with a personal problem, we can find advice at best on the Internet, but it will never be able to tell us how to behave in that peculiar and personal situation. In other words, technology cannot replace our emotional intelligence, it can only facilitate us in some tasks and in the search of information.
Despite all of this, we should not be completely diffident towards technology. If we manage to use it properly, it could be very useful and truly help facilitating our lives. In fact, it basically frees us from minor worries which characterized the past, letting us - theoretically - dedicating more time and effort to care about our inner selves and other people. There are abstract and theoretical issues or tasks which require the complexity of the human thinking and cannot be solved or performed by machines, as futuristic and technological as they may be. They can surely help us, but they are not able to replace our ability to handle a problem in its whole complexity: for example, when it comes to treat a patient, a doctor could be advantaged by using highly technological machines to detect illnesses or to carry out analysis, but ultimately the choice of how to treat the ill will be the result of the consideration of several variables that technology is still not able to evaluate and connect. The ability to make connections and practicing parallel thinking is one that is still a prerogative of human brain and we should value it as it is.
In conclusion, I do not think our ability to think for ourselves will deteriorate: we should just be able to adequate a new way of thinking to the instruments made disposable by technology. A truly wise way to use technology is to make it a perk, an advantage for us and not something that substitutes us, especially when it comes to sensitive and emotional thinking. Moreover, adults and institutions should have a resposibility in preventing young generations to rely too much on technology, teaching them the value of critical thinking and educating them to practice it. This is the key to check the argued deterioration: we cannot simply let things go, but we should make efforts to direct them to the right way.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 152, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to facilitate' or 'facilitate'.
Suggestion: to facilitate; facilitate
... it could be very useful and truly help facilitating our lives. In fact, it basically frees ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, still, at least, for example, in conclusion, in fact, sort of, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 38.0 14.8657303371 256% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 33.0505617978 203% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 86.0 58.6224719101 147% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3148.0 2235.4752809 141% => OK
No of words: 645.0 442.535393258 146% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88062015504 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.03952876749 4.55969084622 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98099419078 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 316.0 215.323595506 147% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48992248062 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 1023.3 704.065955056 145% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.77640449438 450% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 23.0359550562 126% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.2677909241 60.3974514979 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.090909091 118.986275619 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.3181818182 23.4991977007 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.54545454545 5.21951772744 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170285686118 0.243740707755 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0520293950709 0.0831039109588 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0452509361866 0.0758088955206 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103655701764 0.150359130593 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0288224035208 0.0667264976115 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 14.1392134831 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 48.8420337079 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.62 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 154.0 100.480337079 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.2143820225 121% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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