People s behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take In developing and supporting

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People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

There is a poverb that goes like, "I am not what I think I am. I am not what you think I am. I am what I think you think I am." This proverb though confounding at first glance, upon close examiation, can help one understand about majority of the way people behave in and around us in the most succint manner. The prompt suggests that people's behaviour is primarily influenced not by their own will but by their surroundings. I agree with the prompt and feel that the melie in which people are has a profound affect on their behaviour for the following reasons.

Firstly, it is true that one's behavior is influenced by their surroundings. This may not be obviously clear and people can go to the extent of rebutting such claim blatantly. Yes, one would not readily agree to such claim if only they had paid close attention to why they behave in a particular manner. Our behavior is influnced by our surroundings subconsciously, that is, one might not be aware of such influence as it happens involuntarily or at levels not easily perceptable to our conscous mind. There is a whole field of study dedicated to researching on such influence. For example, there was a study which found out that when one is aware of someone watching them typing on a computer, they type at a faster rate. At the same time, they likely to make more mistakes while typing. This finding corroborates the claim that one's behavor is influenced by their surroundings even without their knowledge.

Secondly, the pattern described in the prompt is so ubiquitous that one can observe all around in our dialy lives but we need to pay close attention in order to discern it. For example, let us consider how people behave in officies or at work. If a person is applauded for doing something, the person is more like to do it again and again as others approve of it and at the same time improve his self esteem. On the contrary, if the person is chided or his actions are stigmatized as disgrace, the person wastes no time in abandoning such action. This pattern may not happen consciously and thus, one may not find truth in assertion made in the prompt. But upon deliberation, one would be baffled after an epiphany which reveals the truth in the claim.

However, in the realms of our discussion, we cannot ignore a few exceptions. There will be a few people who does not fit in, namely misfits. They don't care about the status-quo around them and their behavior or actions are determined by their own will. It is sure that they will face some backlash. Nonetheless, they go on to do what they intended to do.

To recapitulate, it is true that our actions are influenced by our surroundings as there are findings from a number of research studies that corroborate such claim and such influences happpen subconsciously and hence not easily discernable. However, there will be a few people who are conscious of such and defy such influence to behave in their own way.

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...ll face some backlash. Nonetheless, they go on to do what they intended to do. ...

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, thus, while, for example, i think, it is true, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 33.0505617978 197% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 58.6224719101 118% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2435.0 2235.4752809 109% => OK
No of words: 523.0 442.535393258 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65583173996 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78217453174 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72462983439 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 215.323595506 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.466539196941 0.4932671777 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 761.4 704.065955056 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 6.24550561798 288% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.4037720536 60.3974514979 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.6538461538 118.986275619 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1153846154 23.4991977007 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.21951772744 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13681544077 0.243740707755 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0411019114944 0.0831039109588 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0459328448731 0.0758088955206 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0739107352428 0.150359130593 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0441325313513 0.0667264976115 66% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 14.1392134831 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 12.1639044944 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 100.480337079 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?


Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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