People who pursue their own intellectual interest for purely personal reasons are more likely to benefit the rest of the world than who try to act for public good.
Nature’s perception of man is to live happily in a convenient way. For that, man tries to earn a living which suits his purpose. As a child, he notices his parents earning for the sake of getting the basics amenities of life. The child chooses to lead a simple or luxurious life based on his studies and career. if he feels that food, clothing and shelter are enough, then he may earn a meagre amount or do social service and be content with it. On the other hand, if he wants to be rich, then accordingly, he may study well to get into a top position in an industry and to get an attractive salary. The entrepreneurs and rich business tycoons are best examples. The decision maker is an individual who is an impetus to his own living.
pursuing their own intellectual interest for purely personal reasons is beneficial to a greater extent. For instance, professionals like doctors, teachers and lawyers, even though they are working to serve the people and nation, ultimately do it for their benefit also. The enormous number of hospitals and educational institutions have been built only for gain. Whatever money was spent for their studies, they try to get it back from their customers, which is evident from the huge amount of fee collected from the clients.
Nevertheless, there are people who do service to nation without expecting anything in return. The best example is mother Theresa who took care of numerous patients suffering from leprosy. she was a foreigner who came to India as a young girl to join as a nun in the Missionaries of mother Mary. without segregation in terms of caste, creed and religion, she took care of innumerable people suffering due to contagious diseases. though she was a humanitarian, she did not expect a single penny from the suffering individuals.
Thus, to sum it all, we can say that people are biased when it comes to money matters which is the sole reason behind the corruptions. An overall survey of human beings in the whole world could lead to two predictions. One is the rich industrialists who pursues his passion in order to earn a good living and to be enjoying the goodness of life., However, there are few running NGO’s in order to do good to the nation without expecting a reward. Hence, the more beneficial one’s are those who progress for personal reasons alone.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, hence, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, then, thus, well, for instance, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1938.0 2235.4752809 87% => OK
No of words: 406.0 442.535393258 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77339901478 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74326744426 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 215.323595506 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56157635468 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 602.1 704.065955056 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.634815228 60.3974514979 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.2857142857 118.986275619 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3333333333 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.28571428571 5.21951772744 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.304893415271 0.243740707755 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0809413319023 0.0831039109588 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0961390605573 0.0758088955206 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171551763924 0.150359130593 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104323006358 0.0667264976115 156% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 14.1392134831 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 100.480337079 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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