People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
External forces, although, play an irrefutable role in attributing to how people behave, I still feel that at the end it is the person’s inner self that calls for that behavior. There can be myriad of circumstances that can try to conquer over us. But, it is the person who chooses to react to it positively or negatively. Therefore, I am not in line with the given claim that people’s behavior is largely determined by his environment. I, rather believe that his own inner force is responsible for his action because of several reasons, as elaborated in body paragraphs.
Firstly, it completely varies from person to person in that how much he is letting the outer forces to cause to his behavior. If someone wants something badly, he/ she will make effort against all the external forces, in order to achieve his/ her goal. On the other hand, some other person might give up to the circumstance and quit. This can be vetted by considering a hypothetical example of a person who is a layman in golf and wants to master it within a month. For doing so, he needs to wake up early every morning at 5 am and go for practice. In this scenario, it completely depends on the person how he disciplines himself. Whatever decision he makes-whether to be consistent with his plan or quit to the circumstance of feeling lazy to get up early- it will be the person himself who chose to behave that way. The external force only acts like a catalyst, which can be made as inert or highly reactive by the person.
On the same line, if a lady, of age 65, wants to remarry, society will criticize her for doing so. In a spot like such, it’s the lady who is causing her behavior-whether to listen to society and forgets about remarrying or feel the fear and take action anyway. As long as a person can discipline and control his actions, external environment hardly has any role in attributing to person’s behavior.
However, there can be circumstances where people become slave to external forces like the time when Britishers came to rule India. In spite of the fact that people hated being ruled, they hardly had any choice but to obey because of their poverty and primacy of the Britishers over India. In such a plight too, some freedom fighters like Bhagat Singh, Subhash Chandra Bose decided to fight against the Britisher, not caring about their lives. This again clearly underscores the aforementioned point that it is the people who are sole responsible for their action.
In summary, although situations can be unfortunate but it is totally up to us as to how we decide to react to it. How much self-discipline, motivation and control we have over ourselves. Rest all becomes insignificant when one is determined in his venture.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
anyway, but, first, firstly, however, if, so, still, therefore, as to, in summary, in spite of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 33.0505617978 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 58.6224719101 128% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2276.0 2235.4752809 102% => OK
No of words: 479.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.751565762 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84528555018 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 215.323595506 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530271398747 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 733.5 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.2407866467 60.3974514979 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 98.9565217391 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8260869565 23.4991977007 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.91304347826 5.21951772744 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.122674565494 0.243740707755 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.038073424842 0.0831039109588 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0394616351315 0.0758088955206 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0732966833203 0.150359130593 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0466369992562 0.0667264976115 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 12.1639044944 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 100.480337079 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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