People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
There are many questions surrounding a person’s behavior. What determines a person’s behavior? Is it the genes they’re born with? The environment in which they live? These are all questions in which need to be answered before one can state what truly defines people and determines their behavior. The statement that people’s behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making is one that I both agree and disagree with. I do believe that there are many external forces that encourage us and persuade us to behave in a certain way. However, on the other hand, I deem there are internal beliefs and understandings that persuade our behavior as well.
When a person is born into a culture with a set of norms and unspoken rules, it is typical that they will adopt the norms of the culture because they are the rules their family believes and has been instilled in them since birth. One can see the exponential influence that external forces have a on behavior when comparing different cultures to each other. The influence of external forces is portrayed during meal times in different cultures. For example, comparing the utensils used at meal time in China versus the utensils used at meal time in America. In China, people typically eat using chopsticks; however, in America, it is typical that people eat with a fork. By comparing these two countries, one can see the large influence that external forces have on behavior.
Another topic that supports the argument that people’s behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making are the internal behaviors that we cannot change. Age and gender are internal behaviors that create a large portion of who we are as individuals and influence our behavior daily. When a person behaves in an immature way that is not appropriate for their age, they are often told to “act your age” by their peers or elders. By being a certain age or gender, there are roles that people are expected to full and act in a certain way. Both age and gender are internal influences that affect our behavior.
In contrast to the topic that our behavior is determined by forces we cannot change, there are external influences in our lives that affect behavior that we can dispose of and not conform the behavior of people surrounding us. For example, if a teenager is socializing with their peers and they are not comfortable with the activities their peers are engaging in, they can choose to leave and not participate in such activities. While this is not common, it is a way we have control over our surroundings and our behavior.
In conclusions, the statement that people’s behavior is largely determined by forces not in their own making is one that I both agree and disagree with. I agree with it because one typically adapts to the culture and gender they are born into. I disagree with it, due to external factors we can change, for instance, the people we surround ourselves with. However, there are questions that need to be investigated and answered before this statement is determined to be true.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 295, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ial influence that external forces have a on behavior when comparing different cu...
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Line 5, column 327, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an immature way" with adverb for "immature"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...r behavior daily. When a person behaves in an immature way that is not appropriate for their age, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, still, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, in contrast to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 38.0 19.5258426966 195% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 28.0 11.3162921348 247% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 75.0 33.0505617978 227% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2590.0 2235.4752809 116% => OK
No of words: 527.0 442.535393258 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91461100569 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79129216042 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7429339692 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 215.323595506 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.38330170778 0.4932671777 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 832.5 704.065955056 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.0410038969 60.3974514979 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.6153846154 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2692307692 23.4991977007 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.80769230769 5.21951772744 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.83258426966 248% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228831005101 0.243740707755 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0795913094411 0.0831039109588 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0757452078826 0.0758088955206 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153345982044 0.150359130593 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0584006088891 0.0667264976115 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 100.480337079 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 11.8971910112 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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