People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
There is difference between behavior of a soldier, an actor and a businessman. People's behavior is largely determined by forces of their own making to an extent.
While an actor can charm with his style and elegance, businessman can impress with his intellectual skills and soldier with his stolid personality. There is a significant difference between behavior of people in different fields. For example to became a soldier, a person has to go through intense training that require determination and courage,that makes his personality stolid. On the other hand to become an actor, with acting skills, person need to be friendly.
While the behavior of a peron in personal life might differ from that in professional life. But behaviour in professinal life affects behavior of people in personal life as well. For example, it can be seen that most of the actors are more social and friendly, while many of computer programmers are not much social.
Moreover people behavior can be affected by officail forces. For example, in an article Mr.Kiran More seletor of Indian cricket team mentioned that he wanted to give M.S.Dhoni a last match to play before his retirement, being his friend and fan. But as authorities did'nt approve his idea, Kiran has to alter his behavior and decline last match for M.S.Dhoni. Or we can see in daily life, a father wants to spend more time with his childrens for a weekend, but due to poverty
he had to work every day of the weekend.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 345, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , that
...g that require determination and courage,that makes his personality stolid. On the ot...
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Line 2, column 467, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ing skills, person need to be friendly. While the behavior of a peron in personal lif...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...puter programmers are not much social. Moreover people behavior can be affected by offi...
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Line 4, column 91, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Kiran
...l forces. For example, in an article Mr.Kiran More seletor of Indian cricket team men...
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Line 4, column 170, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Dhoni
...am mentioned that he wanted to give M.S.Dhoni a last match to play before his retirem...
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Line 4, column 265, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
... his friend and fan. But as authorities didnt approve his idea, Kiran has to alter hi...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 352, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Dhoni
...behavior and decline last match for M.S.Dhoni. Or we can see in daily life, a father ...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, so, well, while, as to, for example, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 58.6224719101 68% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1221.0 2235.4752809 55% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 249.0 442.535393258 56% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90361445783 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97237131171 4.55969084622 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74329233077 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 215.323595506 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.586345381526 0.4932671777 119% => OK
syllable_count: 387.0 704.065955056 55% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.2798468646 60.3974514979 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.9230769231 118.986275619 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1538461538 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.61538461538 5.21951772744 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116110339568 0.243740707755 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0564662923894 0.0831039109588 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0666620919766 0.0758088955206 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0749769498443 0.150359130593 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0660609213533 0.0667264976115 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 100.480337079 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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