The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that they have more leisure time.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Technology has become a very important part of the today’s world as it reduces human effort and is also quite efficient. Moreover, the technological advancement plays a major role in increasing people’s efficiency and giving them leisure time. This helps people by reducing their effort taken to perform tasks so that they can do other productive work in their free time.
Technology is developing in every field and is reducing human effort as well. People do not even have to travel to get work done. For instance, online shopping and online banking are some of the technological applications that help people to get what they want without even having to go out of their home. Technological advancements have made things very convenient for people.
Moreover, if people do all the work that could be done more faster by the use of machines or technology, they would get enervated by all the work and also have less time to spend on their personal lives. Technology helps people to maintain an even balance between work and personal life and also makes any task very convenient.
However, even though technological advancements increase people’s efficiency and gives them more leisure time, it should not be its primary aim. This is because, people would then start relying too much on technology to get their work done and would eventually become lethargic. This could also have a negative impact on people’s health. For instance, spending too much time on mobiles on social media platforms could affect eyesight of individuals and also relying too much on online deliveries would make people lazy and lead to health problems like obesity.
Hence, technological advancements play a major role in helping people to reduce their effort and give them leisure time but it should not primarily focus on that as it would have a negative impact on people’s health as well. It should help them make their work easier but not go to an extant where technology might replace humans.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 184, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... online shopping and online banking are some of the technological applications that help pe...
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Line 6, column 56, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'faster' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: faster
...ople do all the work that could be done more faster by the use of machines or technology, t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, moreover, so, then, well, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 19.5258426966 36% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 58.6224719101 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1670.0 2235.4752809 75% => OK
No of words: 330.0 442.535393258 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06060606061 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67309830449 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 215.323595506 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.493939393939 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 524.7 704.065955056 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.8504100882 60.3974514979 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.333333333 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.6 5.21951772744 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220385401578 0.243740707755 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0947062370743 0.0831039109588 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0710804313059 0.0758088955206 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141584563652 0.150359130593 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0243459208822 0.0667264976115 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.1392134831 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 100.480337079 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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