The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that they have more leisure time.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
With the continuous development of technology in past decades, people now can avoid a lot of the unnecessary labour work in their daily lives, such as washing clothes and dishes. Although someone refutes that technological advancement has brought too much leisure time and resulted in some plagues which have an adverse effect on people, I personally support that the benefits it brings outweigh its defects.
One of the concerns people may have about modern technology is that it makes many people become lazier. For example, most modern families now have washing machines which help them wash clothes and dishes. Although they now have more leisure time with the help of these devices, most of the time is wasted with insipid TV shows and social media instead of making the full use of it to master some living skills, such as cooking and learning new subjects. Moreover, such an unhealthy lifestyle also has led to some health problems, such as obesity, which could put a lot of extra burden on the medicare system.
However, there’re also some positive aspects the technology development has brought to us. As we all know, the fast growing technology has emancipated human being in many different fields, including housework, overlapping calculating work, etc. With the extra time saved by sophisticated machines, people have more time to develop their own interests, which is a must in today’s competitive society. Imagine the life in several decades ago, most ordinary people were tired in maintaining things that of little value, but they had to do them, because there’s no other way to do their work. By contrast, modern society has changed a lot the ways people do things compared to decades ago, and thus people’s living standards have increased considerably.
In addition, more leisure time means people now have more chances to develop relationships with their families and friends. For example, people can hold parties and go hiking with their relatives and friends on weekends if they have completed their work efficaciously. In this way, they are able to experience the marvellous nature and the happiness in their lives. Consider the life without so many highly efficient machines, people may still live a hectic life and deal with meaningless work. Thus, the basic goal of technological development should continue to improve the efficiency, thereby rescuing people from the nightmare of busy lifestyle.
In sum, more spare time means we can spend more time in things we are truly interested with and with people we really care about. However, to make better use of the extra leisure time, we need to overcome our laziness and form a healthy lifestyle.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 172, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...chnology has emancipated human being in many different fields, including housework, overlappin...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'really', 'so', 'still', 'thus', 'for example', 'in addition', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.252485089463 0.240241500013 105% => OK
Verbs: 0.149105367793 0.157235817809 95% => OK
Adjectives: 0.113320079523 0.0880659088768 129% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0477137176938 0.0497285424764 96% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0497017892644 0.0444667217837 112% => OK
Prepositions: 0.111332007952 0.12292977631 91% => OK
Participles: 0.0457256461233 0.0406280797675 113% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.70822611996 2.79330140395 97% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0238568588469 0.030933414821 77% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0715705765408 0.0997080785238 72% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0159045725646 0.0249443105267 64% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00795228628231 0.0148568991511 54% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2698.0 2732.02544248 99% => OK
No of words: 439.0 452.878318584 97% => OK
Chars per words: 6.14578587699 6.0361032391 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.58838876751 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.380410022779 0.366273622748 104% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.28701594533 0.280924506359 102% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.189066059226 0.200843997647 94% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.120728929385 0.132149295362 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70822611996 2.79330140395 97% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 219.290929204 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546697038724 0.48968727796 112% => OK
Word variations: 64.3017057984 55.4138127331 116% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6194690265 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.3888888889 23.380412469 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.2933611228 59.4972553346 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.888888889 141.124799967 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3888888889 23.380412469 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.722222222222 0.674092028746 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.21349557522 19% => OK
Readability: 53.0904834219 51.4728631049 103% => OK
Elegance: 1.66129032258 1.64882698954 101% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.450901790432 0.391690518653 115% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.107702577448 0.123202303941 87% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.062074372268 0.077325440228 80% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.527799217219 0.547984918172 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.119343564138 0.149214159877 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.171737718686 0.161403998019 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0643724010623 0.0892212321368 72% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.335934897488 0.385218514788 87% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.042511090973 0.0692045440612 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.290821231071 0.275328986314 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0496997787144 0.0653680567796 76% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.4325221239 125% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.30420353982 94% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88274336283 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 12.0 7.22455752212 166% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 3.66592920354 136% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.70907079646 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 17.0 13.5995575221 125% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.