A private company should not have the right to do business in a city if the majority of the city’s residents object to the private company’s business operations.
It had been a long time our country had gained freedom and constitution includes article for freedom of expression and the right to be heard by the laws. The prompt recommends that private company should withdraw its decision of doing business in a city if the city residents are against it. Reading through the lines some historic events trigger my mind and as I think more deeply and rationally over the given statement, I strongly agree with this suggestion and argue habitants have complete right to control their land from the invaders for three main reasons.
To begin, the residents are beguilded deviously by the refulgent business people. History has taught us many events- one of the main example I would like to state in relevant to the argument- small part of India was initially controlled by Britain for overseas business, the region ruled by them eventually burgeoned and they conquered India for several decades. Our forefathers had to struggle intensely to regain the land. People were so jejune that they blindly trusted foreigners and yielded everything they had in return for good future, unfortunately it turned the other way round. Officers with business minded are driven solely by self- interest. They never care for the welfare of inhabitants, profit is their main aim. In order to achieve this goal they make specious promises, make the inhabitants have trust in them and once they get control, the naïve people just contrite.
Secondly, the residents have been living in that particular region gor very long, they are well aware of the climate, heritage ,culture, soil, land and so on. If they are raising issue against company’s business operations, there might be some intense reason nettling them. For example, recently some areas of Bangalore have proscribed construction of apartments for five years. The reason being shortage of drinking water and water scarcity to the city residents. It seems that the residents have previously suggested the issue to the concerned department, possibly no action would have been taken to sort the problem. This became nascent and today as we can see the problem is being face by larger mass, if measures would have been taken at earlier step this might not have happened. Hence, it’s highly recommended to follow the residents advice as they know the consequence that might affect people, land, ecosystem on larger scale, this would indirectly lead to holding the project, thus a great loss of time, investment and labour work on company’s side too as is very evident from the example stated.
One might try to justify that this would lead to development of society, bring greater revenues and employment for the regional people, it might appear tempting at first, but once given a deeper analysis- these might turn poignant over long period of time. In conclusion, I would like to restate that I firmly agree with the argument, a private company should not have the right to do business in a city if the majority of the city’s residents object to it. Since, it’s a place of dwelling the measures and decision should be taken considering the welfare of citizens.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... by the laws. The prompt recommends that private company should withdraw its dec...
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... prompt recommends that private company should withdraw its decision of doing bu...
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... are well aware of the climate, heritage ,culture, soil, land and so on. If they a...
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Suggestion: recommended following
... have happened. Hence, it's highly recommended to follow the residents advice as they know the c...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'residents'' or 'resident's'?
Suggestion: residents'; resident's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, if, second, secondly, so, thus, well, for example, i think, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 33.0505617978 136% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 58.6224719101 113% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2640.0 2235.4752809 118% => OK
No of words: 522.0 442.535393258 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05747126437 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77988695657 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60895627938 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 289.0 215.323595506 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553639846743 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 821.7 704.065955056 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.0295108607 60.3974514979 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.0 118.986275619 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1 23.4991977007 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.6 5.21951772744 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.308053997082 0.243740707755 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.097620789266 0.0831039109588 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.151157749224 0.0758088955206 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203437765871 0.150359130593 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106399646537 0.0667264976115 159% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.1392134831 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.34 8.38706741573 111% => OK
difficult_words: 146.0 100.480337079 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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