Progress should be the aim of any great society. People too often cling unnecessarily to obsolete ways of thinking and acting because they enjoy feeling comfortable and fear the unknown.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you either agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not be true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Progress can be as big as creating a time machine or as little as making a decision to follow a healthy life style. Moving forward to bigger and better things is what society should be focused on rather than letting fear and comfort hold them back. In my opinion, everyone should strive for progress but stopping and taking a break to think about the unknown or spending some time in comfort is also okay. I statement will be supported by three of the following points.
First and the most importantly, a little bit of fear of the unknown is okay to push you forward to discover what may have not been discovered yet. Who would've though about twenty years ago that we would have phones that are absolutely flat and can also be used as a mini computer. Steve Jobs had the vision and he brought it to life when he introduced the first Apple iPhone. He states in his book that he did not let the fear of rejection stop him from pursuing his goal. Now, almost the entire world holds a computer in their hands thanks to him. Some will argue that fear is not something that is easily overcome. Yes that is true but instead of letting fear hold you back, let fear be the driving force. They had X-Factor for a reason. The whole show was about facing your fears.
Furthermore, if we only thought about aiming to be a great society, we would get obsessed with the idea and work our selves to death. For example, China is one the five world powers with high technological developments amongst other things. China is also known to work their employees to exhaustion to the point where they are falling asleep on the streets as mentioned in a news article back in 2018. The goal can easily become an obsession and not only harm us, but the people who work for us as well. People who support this point of view would argue that to gain progress, somethings have to be sacrificed. If you sacrificed your life and well being, the progress will not be worth it if you're not there to enjoy it.
Last but not the least, this statement holds some weight to it. If people sat around watching movies all day instead of starting the business they had dreamt of starting one day because they fear failure, they will never know what they were capable of. Jeff Bezos started Amazon in his apartment building and now it's a multi billion industry. If he let fear hold him back, we would not have online shopping as it is today.
Letting fear hold you back is not a good thing but letting yourself be comfortable in what you do is okay too. There isn't a simple answer to this statement. Work hard but also take a breather to make sure you are okay and the people around you are okay.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 35, Rule ID: LITTLE_BIT[1]
Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
.... First and the most importantly, a little bit of fear of the unknown is okay to push ...
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Line 3, column 152, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: would've
...t may have not been discovered yet. Who wouldve though about twenty years ago that we w...
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Line 5, column 693, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: you're
...g, the progress will not be worth it if youre not there to enjoy it. Last but not...
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Line 7, column 314, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...mazon in his apartment building and now its a multi billion industry. If he let fea...
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Line 9, column 118, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
...table in what you do is okay too. There isnt a simple answer to this statement. Work...
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Line 9, column 223, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding people'?
Suggestion: the surrounding people
... breather to make sure you are okay and the people around you are okay.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, may, so, well, for example, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 33.0505617978 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 58.6224719101 80% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2177.0 2235.4752809 97% => OK
No of words: 493.0 442.535393258 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.41582150101 5.05705443957 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71206996034 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.22108144151 2.79657885939 79% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 215.323595506 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521298174442 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 657.0 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.59117977528 82% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.4515071074 60.3974514979 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.7307692308 118.986275619 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9615384615 23.4991977007 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.92307692308 5.21951772744 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205170500732 0.243740707755 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0510466368923 0.0831039109588 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0497031713674 0.0758088955206 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121666862191 0.150359130593 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0358943504858 0.0667264976115 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 14.1392134831 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 78.59 48.8420337079 161% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 12.1743820225 56% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.36 12.1639044944 69% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.87 8.38706741573 82% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 100.480337079 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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