School should cut funding for extracurricular activities such as sports and the arts when school buildings are in need of repair.
Extracurricular activities and arts are equally important as much as repairing a needed school building. We can think this as both ways that providing funds for extracurricular activities can get school returns investing in arts can get the school returns as well the prizes the fame the support by the state government, backup and funding from huge institution can uplift the school in an economic way. On Contrary taking this risk can be costly as success is not definite. But unless the school tries it will still lack the funding required to keep the building updated in the coming years. Thus, it will not be a vice idea to cut down on extracurricular activities and arts funding.
I would bend a little into the favor of not cutting down the extracurricular activities and arts, due to increasing competition the school has to keep up with a lot apart form academics. There are so many sports that are increasing in fame, and it’s the extracurricular activities that separate the school from other ordinary schools cause every parent wants to see their kid excel in every field possible not just academics. The more a school excels in extracurricular activities it can get an international recognition and the government investing in such schools so that the school produces more talent that is important for world recognition. It similarly goes for the various other arts which can rise the level of the school and more the recognition the school has better funding and the better infrastructure. The funding to keep it updated for years which is much more important than just giving a repair to the building and again falling short of funding. We need to think for the future as well and funding in extracurricular activities and arts are very important cause it brings that extra required funding for the very growth of the school.
We may never know what a school can be extremely famous for in the near future maybe for its studies or academics or maybe for its rich culture maybe for its sports maybe for its friendly culture or maybe for its various arts maybe for its research etc. Entering fame can bring funding to the school that it had always been waiting for.
On the other hand we also cannot neglect the fact that the building is in need of repair and it will be risky for all the students who are learning there and it can be a real issue cause it involves a persons life. But as the author has not specified the criticality of the repair it may be toilet repair it may be window repair it may be some other casual repairs we may never know. But without knowing the criticality we cannot just cut funding on extracurricular activities and arts that can help the school with return funding from various sources.
If we get good returns on our investment who would cut down on it and disturb the whole future of the school as the criticality of the repair is not specified it may be something called as small repairs and to cut down on such a valuable investment is a loss for the institution.
Thus I believe that School should not cut funding for extracurricular activities such as sports and arts when school buildings are in need of repair.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in an economic way" with adverb for "economic"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... huge institution can uplift the school in an economic way. On Contrary taking this risk can be co...
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Line 1, column 391, Rule ID: ECONOMIC_ECONOMICAL[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economical' (=affordable, cheap)?
Suggestion: economical
...institution can uplift the school in an economic way. On Contrary taking this risk can b...
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Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'apart from'?
Suggestion: apart from
...on the school has to keep up with a lot apart form academics. There are so many sports tha...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...can be a real issue cause it involves a persons life. But as the author has not specifi...
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Suggestion: Thus,
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Line 6, column 151, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...school buildings are in need of repair.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, similarly, so, still, thus, well, as to, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 28.0 12.4196629213 225% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 23.0 14.8657303371 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 33.0505617978 136% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2620.0 2235.4752809 117% => OK
No of words: 557.0 442.535393258 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70377019749 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85807034144 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73902380738 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 215.323595506 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.391382405745 0.4932671777 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 802.8 704.065955056 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 30.0 23.0359550562 130% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.4261670384 60.3974514979 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.555555556 118.986275619 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.9444444444 23.4991977007 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.83333333333 5.21951772744 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.580360361952 0.243740707755 238% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.227606138428 0.0831039109588 274% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.184976136946 0.0758088955206 244% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.391148037013 0.150359130593 260% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.250881169988 0.0667264976115 376% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 14.1392134831 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.95 48.8420337079 119% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 12.1743820225 103% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 12.1639044944 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.05 8.38706741573 84% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 100.480337079 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.2143820225 125% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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