Schools should cut funding for extracurricular activities such as sports and the arts when school buildings are in need of repair.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with this recommendation and explain your rea

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Schools should cut funding for extracurricular activities such as sports and the arts when school buildings are in need of repair.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with this recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and sup porting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.

In the statement author suggests that schools should eliminate funds for extracurricular activities when in the need of repair. Sometimes, it is possible that schools need to take difficult decisions but the difficulty determined from case to case. For instance, the decision regarding repair of weak roof or water tank are highly essential while the money needed for re-painting of schools is not that necessary and can be done on yearly basis after 5 to 6 years but repair in the first case need to be done on priority basis since it will affect the academics of the student and can also be dangerous for the school and the students.

While, the extracurricular activities such as arts and sports are essential for students to make them healthy and active. As a result they can earn good grades and can also become famous and experts in the field of arts and sports which in turn will be a great advertisement for the school, possibly increasing its enrollment and revenue at higher level. The arts and sports has a huge scope where it can bring popularity to school such as at inter-school competitions or at international level like the Saurabh Chaudhary, the gold medalist who brought fame to his country at international level and at the same time to his school and village because of sports. There are many more that also brought fame to their schools at higher levels all because of sports and arts.

Nevertheless, schools can close those particular activities which are less popular among the students saving their funds. Schools can also postpone the events which consume lots of money such as annual function or D.J. night and such others. Further, schools can also save their money by not having school picnics or tours for a little while during the time of repair. They can also try to change their schedule by conducting period of arts and sports once in a week rather daily, if it can save the required funds for the school.

On the other hand, in spite of cutting funds on extracurricular activities there can be more options which school can consider getting the money required for the repair. Schools can look for other revenue sources such as school can ask for funds from the trustees of the school or society in which it is situated. If possible, they can also revise the fee which can earn an increased amount of revenue to the school. It can also advertise for more enrollments in the school which in return will increase its revenue with more admissions.

Hence, just sticking to the idea of cutting the funds of extracurricular activities doesn’t sounds good and more options can be considered or looked to collect the required amount for the repair. The idea of cutting funds on extracurricular activities for the repair in the school gives rise to the question that what is the condition of school, where its fund goes. Since, school which is cutting funds of these activities today may be in future it will close the required academic things like laboratories or classes if it will not find the proper sources of revenue and if it will not save the money properly for emergency use.

So, the conclusion is given in the proverb that “All work and no play make jack a dull boy.” Hence, school without extracurricular activities and students without play seems very colorless. And the school needs to take the decision keeping all things in mind. Since, physical health gained by games and mental health needed for academics go hand–in-hand so, accordingly school can try more options to resolve their problem for funds needed in repair.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, hence, if, look, may, nevertheless, regarding, so, while, for instance, such as, as a result, in spite of, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 30.0 12.4196629213 242% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 30.0 14.8657303371 202% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 58.6224719101 130% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2990.0 2235.4752809 134% => OK
No of words: 613.0 442.535393258 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87765089723 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.97582523872 4.55969084622 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65396785392 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 215.323595506 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.41924959217 0.4932671777 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 899.1 704.065955056 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 23.0359550562 126% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.1702704926 60.3974514979 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.380952381 118.986275619 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.1904761905 23.4991977007 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.38095238095 5.21951772744 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.331691184938 0.243740707755 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.13933687895 0.0831039109588 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0617818305878 0.0758088955206 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205422273723 0.150359130593 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0315157774632 0.0667264976115 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 14.1392134831 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.62 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 11.8971910112 164% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.2143820225 121% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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