Schools should cut funding for extracurricular activities such as sports and the arts when school buildings are in need of repair.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with this recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and sup porting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Schools are the place where education is given the utmost importance. Education holds priority over every other matter. But even if it remains the primary focus of any school, attention needs to be given to extracurricular activities such as sports, arts and various other non-academic activities. The idea about schools cutting the funding for extracurricular activity in order to repair the buildings is somewhat disagreeable.
With all the kinds of global level competitions going on around the world, the participants need to start polishing their skills at a very early age. That kind of training can be given during their time at school. Schools as a result keep aside funding that are completely used for extracurricular activities. There are many state, national and international competitions for children as well. The participants or athletes may not be able to afford the equipments or the training required on their own. Schools during such times should help the candidate pursuing the sport wholeheartedly. It may seem to be a bad idea to cut the funding and use it for building repairs. The student may rise above others in the competition with flying colours and in turn would make a name for the school. So the repairs can still wait and try to find an alternate way of funding.
There is another reason for the schools not to cut the funding. This is a significant reason that would make people disagree with the statement. Nowadays, in today’s lifestyle with the entire hectic schedule for students and the increasing fast food chain disturbs the diet of a majority of the students. As it is very well known ‘Health is Wealth’, it becomes very important to become health conscious. By compelling the students to do extracurricular activities regularly it would help in maintaining their health and physique in a great condition. This in turn would make some students love a particular sport and he or she may keep on with it and would turn out to be super athlete for the nation in coming future. Apart from sports, certain individuals are more inclined towards the artistic side and would like to pursue their interest in the same field. By cutting the funding it would hamper their activities for an appreciable period of time. It can cause stress as they would not be able to carry on with their art.
However, there is another angle through which the above idea can be viewed. The school building is in a terrible condition and needs repairs. The only possible way to divert some lacking funds is to cut funds for extracurricular activities. For such a situation, for the school to be in a working state should cut off the funds. The idea of cutting off the funds for extracurricular activities would be depending on the situation. There is no recent upcoming competition and the school can then make redistribution of funds to repair the building of the school.
The topic at hand is a very complex issue. The opinions may differ from person to person and thus are no easy answers. As mentioned earlier it would certainly depend on the situation whether to cut funds for the extracurricular activities such as sports and arts or not.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 321, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun state seems to be countable; consider using: 'many states'.
Suggestion: many states
...r extracurricular activities. There are many state, national and international competition...
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Line 3, column 952, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...per their activities for an appreciable period of time. It can cause stress as they would not ...
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Line 4, column 402, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...ds for extracurricular activities would be depending on the situation. There is no recent up...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, still, then, thus, well, apart from, kind of, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.4196629213 185% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2645.0 2235.4752809 118% => OK
No of words: 537.0 442.535393258 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92551210428 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81386128306 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90526069831 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.467411545624 0.4932671777 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 810.9 704.065955056 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.2370786517 153% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.2112256297 60.3974514979 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 85.3225806452 118.986275619 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3225806452 23.4991977007 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.21951772744 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 5.13820224719 214% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312602971929 0.243740707755 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0906202591244 0.0831039109588 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.072001326472 0.0758088955206 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196289190039 0.150359130593 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0658781514012 0.0667264976115 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 14.1392134831 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.8420337079 128% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.1743820225 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 100.480337079 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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