Claim: In order to help small businesses thrive, government should play a minimal role in private business matters.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Business can be generally classified as small, moderate and large scale. Here the claim is that the government should play a minimal role in the private business matters in order for the small business to thrive successfully. In my opinion I strongly disagree with the claim for the following two reasons.
Firstly, the small businesses are the ones that are usually small start ups and are not in the market for a long period of time. That is they are the new business set-ups. The intervention of the government can positively help the business to grow profoundly. For instance the public sectors which are the ones controlled by the government are sometimes in need of a complementary product for their industries or business. The complementary product that they received till now was from a bigger and well settled business. But their diversion towards the small business set-up which provides them with the same product at cheaper rates than at what they used to get will help the small business to thrive greatly. As a result for that small business the government played a huge role for their success. That small business will be highly grateful to the government for their help which will help them to create a name for themselves in the market. Thus in the initial stages government’s involvement benefits the small businesses.
Secondly, the since the small business are usually just start-ups, the required legal formalities of taxes and various other matters are too big a stress for them. Consider for example, if the government thinks that the business idea is promising enough and will create good economic returns for the business as well benefit the government in some or the other way, it can exempt or wave off certain taxes for the small business. In a way it makes the small business a little bit stress free so that it can focus on making the business a successful venture. With such exemptions from the government the small businesses can focus on their products to develop faster and help the government in return with good economic returns.
There is a possibility that government intervention in the private business matters may create a bit of a hindrance in the progress of the small business by compelling the business to restrict some of its activities due to the certain restrictions imposed onto the, by the government. However, that rarely is the case with small business. As a result the government intervention will always prove beneficial to the small business seeking to thrive in the market
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 115, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ps and are not in the market for a long period of time. That is they are the new business set-...
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Line 3, column 136, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[10]
Message: The pronoun is must be used with 'are'.
Suggestion: are
... market for a long period of time. That is they are the new business set-ups. The ...
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Line 3, column 949, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...te a name for themselves in the market. Thus in the initial stages government's...
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Line 5, column 12, Rule ID: THE_EXACTLY_THE[1]
Message: Duplicated 'the' in the phrase: 'the since the'. Did you mean 'since the'?
Suggestion: since the
...its the small businesses. Secondly, the since the small business are usually just start-u...
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Line 5, column 236, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...overnment thinks that the business idea is promising enough and will create good economic re...
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Line 5, column 471, Rule ID: LITTLE_BIT[1]
Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
... In a way it makes the small business a little bit stress free so that it can focus on mak...
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Line 7, column 263, Rule ID: THE_PUNCT[1]
Message: Did you forget something after 'the'?
...o the certain restrictions imposed onto the, by the government. However, that rarely...
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Line 7, column 301, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'rarely' is usually put after the verb 'is'.
Suggestion: is rarely
...o the, by the government. However, that rarely is the case with small business. As a resu...
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Line 7, column 341, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...rarely is the case with small business. As a result the government intervention wi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, well, for example, for instance, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2122.0 2235.4752809 95% => OK
No of words: 426.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98122065728 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77037177547 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 215.323595506 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.441314553991 0.4932671777 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 650.7 704.065955056 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.2302217443 60.3974514979 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.684210526 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4210526316 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.63157894737 5.21951772744 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.32382974941 0.243740707755 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124238905866 0.0831039109588 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0836225909526 0.0758088955206 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.239069719952 0.150359130593 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0717681956915 0.0667264976115 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 100.480337079 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.