Claim: In order to help small businesses thrive, government should play a minimal role in private business matters.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In
developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The perfect relationship between the country's government and its business sector has been a debated topic since time immemorial. countries across the globe have adopted different approaches to the issue and have witnessed consequences both good and bad. The author in the above claim states that this perfect relationship can be achieved if the government isolates itself from private business matters as much as possible. Though it is reasonable to argue private business are best when given the freedom to function in the most profitable manner and efficient manner, without severe interference from the government, to assume that this should be case with every business in the country is far-fetched and can often lead to unintended results.
China, a country that is known for the control its government assumes on its businesses, experienced massive development as it transitioned from a third-world country to one of the world's biggest economies over the decades. this control helped authorities make sure that resources were equally distributed amongst its citizens, that no one individual continued to have an advantage. Meanwhile,it also ensured that entrepreneurs were sufficiently incentivised and markets regulated so as to cater to the needs of all people, wealthy or not. However, this is definitely not an example of all good and no flaws. Many individuals native to the country are known to have migrated to countries that were lenient with accumulation of wealth and allowed individuals to take advantage of their skills and resources to gain the upper hand in society. These trends have called for discussions on the appropriate amount of control to be exerted so as to keep talents of the country witin itself, without losing it all to its competitors.
Its close neighbor, India, is another country where events took place in a different sequence. Breaking free from the ties of its colonizer, the country decided to adopt a relatively socialist approach to development, whereby state-owned enterprises pioneered in every sector and private institutions were heavily monitored and licensed. Things took a downturn when it faced fiscal crisis and was unable to compete with its global conterparts. The best medicine to the disease was to boost private presence in the country.
The reason why minimized role of the government can be helpful for the country is supported by the fact that suppliers and buyers of any product function so as to maximize their rewards. interference of the government merely disrupts this equilibrium. Therefore, while I do considerably agree with the author's claim, it is dangerous to suggest that governments play no role in the business sector. equal development of all sections of the society cannot take place unless authorities make sincere efforts to uplift weaker sections out of poverty. so, in conclusion the best way to ensure that businesses thrive is to provide them with freedom to maximize their efficiency accompanied by necessary and minimal regulations, but for the greater good of the economy it is also vital that the government steps in once a while to ensure that the goals of individual businesses are aligned with national goals.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... a debated topic since time immemorial. countries across the globe have adopted different...
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...vernment, to assume that this should be case with every business in the country is f...
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...rom a third-world country to one of the worlds biggest economies over the decades. this contro...
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...lds biggest economies over the decades. this control helped authorities make sure th...
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...ontinued to have an advantage. Meanwhile,it also ensured that entrepreneurs were su...
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...ntly incentivised and markets regulated so as to cater to the needs of all people, wealt...
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...opriate amount of control to be exerted so as to keep talents of the country witin itsel...
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...thout losing it all to its competitors. Its close neighbor, India, is another co...
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...iers and buyers of any product function so as to maximize their rewards. interference of...
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...ts play no role in the business sector. equal development of all sections of the soci...
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... uplift weaker sections out of poverty. so, in conclusion the best way to ensure t...
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...nesses are aligned with national goals.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, therefore, third, while, as to, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 58.6224719101 130% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2699.0 2235.4752809 121% => OK
No of words: 511.0 442.535393258 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28180039139 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75450408675 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93834296816 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 272.0 215.323595506 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53228962818 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 861.3 704.065955056 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 77.7526798533 60.3974514979 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.052631579 118.986275619 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8947368421 23.4991977007 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.84210526316 5.21951772744 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 7.80617977528 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154886035792 0.243740707755 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0487818665207 0.0831039109588 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0602589401803 0.0758088955206 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0993145677372 0.150359130593 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0766261129086 0.0667264976115 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 14.1392134831 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 48.8420337079 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 12.1639044944 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.62 8.38706741573 115% => OK
difficult_words: 152.0 100.480337079 151% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.