Schools should cut funding for extracurricular activities such as sports and the arts when school buildings are in need of repair.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain the reasoning for the positioning you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your positions.
“All work and no play, makes Jack a dull boy.”, rightly goes the age old adage. The cardinality of sports, arts and other co-corricular activities on the holistic development of a child is backed well by all domains of scientific research as well as theological sages. Compromising on extra-cirriculars of students in order to repair buildings doesnot appear to be a sagacious decision as far as students welfare is concerned.
To charge out minds to comprehend and learn academically challenged material, our mind needs to be sharp and at its best state to study. Extra-cirriculars are proven to refresh our minds and relax them, so that they are at their best form to grasp the complex academic studies. For instance, a research conducted at IIT Bombay says that a mind can focus at it’s best for 40 hours only. Breaks and refreshments enhance the mental faculties upto 40%. Therefore, cutting on sports and arts and similar activies can negatively impact student’s performance. Hence, these activities must not be curtailed at any cost as it would indirectly hamper the primary reason for which schools are running - education.
Furthermore, the repair of buildings is not as great a necessity for the schools which are meant for overall development of the students. For example, my school SGSITS, Indore located in central India is one of the best in the state. It stands out because it has state of the art faculties and platforms for extra-corricular activities. Since it is a government funded school with a lot of fund scarcity, it doesnot have very robust, aethetically pleasing, well painted and well furnished buildings. But these things donot bring down the overall reputation of the school wich is built on the basis of how competitive it is in academics and extra-corricular activities.
Also, there are some schools which are well to do and have enough fundings to ensure repairment of buildings and other student activities in he school simultaneously. In these cases, there is no question of stinting on the arts or sport activities of the students in order to fund building construction.
However, some may argue that shabby and weak buildings are not conducive to learning atmosphere for the students and hamper their education by affecting them psycologically. While, I agree that there may be some affect on the education due to unappealing and tenuous buildings on campus, but definitely the effect of confiscating extra-corriculars would be on much greater degree.
In sum, the schools must not cut on the funds of extra-cirricular activities as they help wholesome development of students and harbor learning of the academic material effectively. While, if possible, the buildings must also be reapaired in the schools but nary at the cost of arts and sports.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 15, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'minds comprehending'.
Suggestion: minds comprehending
... welfare is concerned. To charge out minds to comprehend and learn academically challenged mater...
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Line 5, column 264, Rule ID: STATE_OF_THE_ART[1]
Message: Did you mean 'state-of-the-art'?
Suggestion: state-of-the-art
...the state. It stands out because it has state of the art faculties and platforms for extra-corri...
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Line 7, column 145, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'schools'.
Suggestion: schools
...ings and other student activities in he school simultaneously. In these cases, there i...
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Line 9, column 213, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
.... While, I agree that there may be some affect on the education due to unappealing and te...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'furthermore', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'therefore', 'well', 'while', 'for example', 'for instance', 'as well as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.247081712062 0.240241500013 103% => OK
Verbs: 0.147859922179 0.157235817809 94% => OK
Adjectives: 0.079766536965 0.0880659088768 91% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0603112840467 0.0497285424764 121% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0369649805447 0.0444667217837 83% => OK
Prepositions: 0.130350194553 0.12292977631 106% => OK
Participles: 0.0389105058366 0.0406280797675 96% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.19322675913 2.79330140395 114% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0252918287938 0.030933414821 82% => OK
Particles: 0.00583657587549 0.0016655270985 350% => OK
Determiners: 0.0875486381323 0.0997080785238 88% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0175097276265 0.0249443105267 70% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00778210116732 0.0148568991511 52% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2813.0 2732.02544248 103% => OK
No of words: 457.0 452.878318584 101% => OK
Chars per words: 6.15536105033 6.0361032391 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.58838876751 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.365426695842 0.366273622748 100% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.286652078775 0.280924506359 102% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.216630196937 0.200843997647 108% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.168490153173 0.132149295362 127% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19322675913 2.79330140395 114% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 219.290929204 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527352297593 0.48968727796 108% => OK
Word variations: 61.6341360955 55.4138127331 111% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6194690265 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.85 23.380412469 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.4066958127 59.4972553346 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.65 141.124799967 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.85 23.380412469 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.7 0.674092028746 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.94800884956 121% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.21349557522 77% => OK
Readability: 51.5152078775 51.4728631049 100% => OK
Elegance: 1.69841269841 1.64882698954 103% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.480898589764 0.391690518653 123% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.138177480598 0.123202303941 112% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0710005364305 0.077325440228 92% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.569768108145 0.547984918172 104% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.15878991424 0.149214159877 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.190033408229 0.161403998019 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0916657411705 0.0892212321368 103% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.265126407541 0.385218514788 69% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0639565450392 0.0692045440612 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.309703417151 0.275328986314 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0756869505614 0.0653680567796 116% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.4325221239 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.30420353982 94% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88274336283 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 7.22455752212 111% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 3.66592920354 136% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.70907079646 148% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 13.5995575221 125% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.