Schools should cut funding for extracurricular activities such as sports and the arts when school buildings are in need of repair.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with this recommendation and explain your rea

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Schools should cut funding for extracurricular activities such as sports and the arts when school buildings are in need of repair.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with this recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and sup porting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.

A school is a place where a child spends most of his day. It is very important that the school is in a presentable condition and should provide all possible amenities to the student. The claim suggests that if the school's buildings need repair, we should cut funding from extracurricular activities. I agree with this prompts and believe that even though extracurricular activities are extremely important for the holistic development of a child, it is much more essential to provide a proper infrastructure.

Admittedly, extracurricular activities is important for the overall development of a student. Extracurriculars teach student some of the very important qualities and skills in life like critical thinking, public speaking, team-work and discipline. It has been observed that students who are active in both academics and non-academics often face less stress in life. Thus, we cannot neglect the importance of non-academics in schools.

However, it is quintessential for a school to maintain it's buildings properly. The school should be in a presentable condition as it is the first thing that is considered during the admissions. If the admissions are affected, it will further affect both academics and non-academics. For instance, if we consider a school with ill-maintained buildings, a parent is less likely to admit their child into that school even if the academics is really good. If the admissions plummet, the school revenue will drop and as a result the school will have lack of funds for any kind of development. It would be prudent to cut the cost of extracurricular activities for a short period of time instead of facing long time repercussions.

Also, damaged buildings are a safety hazard. Would you let your child study in a school where you are not sure whether the school's building may fall after a feeble earthquake? Further, It would be wrong on the side of the school's board to put students on such a high risk and rather focus their funds on extracurricular activities.

Therefore, we should not completely neglect extracurricular activities as they are really important for a child's proper development, but if the school buildings require some serious repairs, it is going to be a wise move from the school's administration to invest their money on the school's building for a short time and if required, even cut funding from extracurricular activities.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 314, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
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...student. Extracurriculars teach student some of the very important qualities and skills in ...
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... extracurricular activities for a short period of time instead of facing long time repercussio...
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Line 9, column 231, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'schools'' or 'school's'?
Suggestion: schools'; school's
... it is going to be a wise move from the schools administration to invest their money on...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, really, so, therefore, thus, for instance, kind of, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 58.6224719101 68% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2007.0 2235.4752809 90% => OK
No of words: 387.0 442.535393258 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18604651163 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.28204640675 2.79657885939 117% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 215.323595506 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.485788113695 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 611.1 704.065955056 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.7980463718 60.3974514979 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.5 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.21951772744 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312784216316 0.243740707755 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100622217366 0.0831039109588 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0735667893288 0.0758088955206 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188748654617 0.150359130593 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0708008752345 0.0667264976115 106% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 100.480337079 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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