Society should identify those children who have special talents and provide training for them at an early age to develop their talents.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Many people believe that the success of great people like Steve Jobs, Albert Einstein and Bill Gates are devoted to their innate talent. Despite Thomas Edison’s brilliant quote: “success comes from 1% of talent and 99% of perspiration”, it is conspicuous that successful person often possessed certain kind of talent in a particular field that is superior than others. Hence, the society underscores the importance of identifying gifted children and provide essential training at their young age so they could become the next great person in future. While I agree that talented children need to be identified and trained when they are young, this recommendation should be adopted depends on the type of talent they possess.
The first type of talent relates to the mathematics and natural science field. Children that are talented in this field should be promoted to higher level institution and more rigorous and advance training should be provided. These children are usually possessing knowledge that are beyond their current learning level. The school curriculum is unable to provide them teaching that could be matched with their level of understanding. For example, Terence Tao had already exhibited an extraordinary mathematical abilities when he was only at the age of 9 and hence was promoted to university-level mathematical course to obtain more knowledge that could fit his ability. Providing a rigorous and advance training to these children are important because they can access to higher level learning materials and experimental equipment. With these resources, they can better develop their talent and eventually be a pundit in that particular field.
On the other hand, children with sports and arts talents should also be identified and given training that could help them to discover and improve their talents. At young age, many children has already exposed to many sports and performance at their school. Through these activities children with relevant talents can be easily discovered by evaluating their performance in a particular sport or performance. Training should be given to these children in order to become the best athlete or actor because the lifespan of their career in this field are shorter. The journey of an athlete usually begin at a very young age because young athlete has better physical condition. In addition, most of the athlete retire at the age of 35 during the golden age of the others. For instance, the world fastest sprinter – Usain Bolt began his professional athlete career at the age of 18 and retired in 2017 at the age of 31.
Despite the two special fields of talents that need to receive training at the early age, children who are gifted with linguistic ability does not need to go through any specific training. This is due to the nature of linguistic which require neither the access to particular materials nor the need to begin at the very young age to success in future. In fact, almost everyone can be a talented linguists because to master a language it requires diligent more than talent. There are many countries that practice bilingual or trilingual, which proves that particular training is unnecessary to become a professional linguist. The only thing linguist needs is practice. Through continuous practice in reading, writing and communicating with others, almost everyone can become familiar with a new language.
To sum up, it is not necessary to provide training to every children with identified talents. Training should be provided based on the talent they possess in different segmentation of talent fields such as mathematics, natural science, sports, arts and language. While training is required to better develop children with talent in science and sports field, talented children in language field is not necessary. Although it is important to discover a specific talent in children, it should not regard it as the only factor to determine their success. After all, everyone can achieve his own success with diligence, just like what Thomas Edison quoted.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 372, Rule ID: SUPERIOR_THAN[1]
Message: The adjective superior is normally used with 'to'.
Suggestion: to
... in a particular field that is superior than others. Hence, the society underscores ...
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...they could become the next great person in future. While I agree that talented children n...
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...ning should be provided. These children are usually possessing knowledge that are beyond their current...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'ability'?
Suggestion: ability
...exhibited an extraordinary mathematical abilities when he was only at the age of 9 and he...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'hence' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'hences'.
Suggestion: hences
...es when he was only at the age of 9 and hence was promoted to university-level mathem...
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Suggestion:
...8 and retired in 2017 at the age of 31. Despite the two special fields of talent...
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
... begin at the very young age to success in future. In fact, almost everyone can be a tale...
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Suggestion: linguist
...fact, almost everyone can be a talented linguists because to master a language it require...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e, just like what Thomas Edison quoted.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, if, so, while, after all, for example, for instance, in addition, in fact, kind of, such as, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 19.5258426966 164% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 14.8657303371 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 33.0505617978 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 98.0 58.6224719101 167% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3422.0 2235.4752809 153% => OK
No of words: 651.0 442.535393258 147% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25652841782 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.05120793913 4.55969084622 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80083844189 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 289.0 215.323595506 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.443932411674 0.4932671777 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1061.1 704.065955056 151% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.38483146067 251% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.2370786517 143% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2826069754 60.3974514979 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.0 118.986275619 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4482758621 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.86206896552 5.21951772744 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 10.2758426966 195% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.296253010914 0.243740707755 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0887346053695 0.0831039109588 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0503931545183 0.0758088955206 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177136594074 0.150359130593 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0266783312536 0.0667264976115 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 148.0 100.480337079 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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