Society should identify those children who have special talents and provide training for them at an early age to develop their talents.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
What is the responsibility of society for its talents, assisting in their career development or staying aloof? While many critics - including the author of this argument - might argue that any society should tutor its talents after identifying them, this notion is not worldly-wise. Therefore, as far as I am concerned, I believe that society should identify poor talents and equip them with skills to develop their talents, irrespective of their age.
First of all, critics who would argue that society, after identifying, has the responsibility to train talented pupils at their early age might argue that society being the umbrella of its people has moral responsibility to assist to the career development of its talent children. They may further argue that society should bear the responsibility of providing them necessary with necessary worldly skills. However, in my view, this view is very extreme. In this real world, society can not assist to the career development of all the talents. What a society can do is identify some poor talents who are deprived of hospitable school environment, and help them to get a place where they can learn to sharpen themselves. That is what happening these days. Some developed nations, for example, selects some talents from poor - third world - countries and provide them scholarship to brighten their career. They select few people, for they can not effort to assist to the career development of all the talents.
Now, consider the another aspect of the argument which I adhere: society should identify poor talents and equip them with skills to develop their talents, irrespective of their age. In our societies, there are two type of children, one is who go to school, and another is who have potentiality and talent, yet do not have financial stamina to school. Those who are going to school do so under the sponsorship of their parents; however, there is none to support the study of those impoverished talents. Therefore, in such context, society should identify its poor - and genuine minded too, and help them to get necessary training or knowledge. CTEVT of Nepal, for instance, do the same: it recently called application from earthquake affected families to equip them with necessary vocational skills to make their life easier, and comfortable.
Similarly, identifying some indigent talents and providing them some assistance is fair also. Training and education is already accessible to the richer. The concern of the society should be those who are deprived of the skills and the knowledge. Take example of myself; when I was juvenile, I father had not enough money to send me to the school. However, Amardeep Devkota, a renowned social worker of our district, met my father and managed scholarship for my study. Today, I hold bachelors in forest science which is something given to me by my society.
Therefore, at the end of the day, the argument, and the examples, presented above holds water. While analyzing the practical aspect, no any society can assist to the career development of all its talents. What a society can and need to do is to identify poor talents, and assist them and their career development. It is a worldly-wise concept to boot.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'similarly', 'so', 'therefore', 'third', 'while', 'for example', 'for instance', 'first of all', 'in my view']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.221854304636 0.240241500013 92% => OK
Verbs: 0.158940397351 0.157235817809 101% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0645695364238 0.0880659088768 73% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0380794701987 0.0497285424764 77% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0794701986755 0.0444667217837 179% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.0894039735099 0.12292977631 73% => OK
Participles: 0.0281456953642 0.0406280797675 69% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.78603669195 2.79330140395 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0430463576159 0.030933414821 139% => OK
Particles: 0.00165562913907 0.0016655270985 99% => OK
Determiners: 0.0877483443709 0.0997080785238 88% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0264900662252 0.0249443105267 106% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.023178807947 0.0148568991511 156% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3229.0 2732.02544248 118% => OK
No of words: 534.0 452.878318584 118% => OK
Chars per words: 6.0468164794 6.0361032391 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80712388197 4.58838876751 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.376404494382 0.366273622748 103% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.292134831461 0.280924506359 104% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.194756554307 0.200843997647 97% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.119850187266 0.132149295362 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78603669195 2.79330140395 100% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 219.290929204 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.453183520599 0.48968727796 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 52.9144296375 55.4138127331 95% => OK
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6194690265 126% => OK
Sentence length: 20.5384615385 23.380412469 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.0616156254 59.4972553346 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.192307692 141.124799967 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5384615385 23.380412469 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.538461538462 0.674092028746 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.21349557522 115% => OK
Readability: 49.7519446845 51.4728631049 97% => OK
Elegance: 1.22754491018 1.64882698954 74% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.422574421062 0.391690518653 108% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.107798428825 0.123202303941 87% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0715676646628 0.077325440228 93% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.478999177833 0.547984918172 87% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.145388554144 0.149214159877 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1608115914 0.161403998019 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0803962301471 0.0892212321368 90% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.470015567686 0.385218514788 122% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0282127430659 0.0692045440612 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.312043574694 0.275328986314 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0476548292572 0.0653680567796 73% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.4325221239 125% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.30420353982 132% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88274336283 123% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 7.22455752212 111% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 3.66592920354 136% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.70907079646 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 13.0 13.5995575221 96% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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