Some people argue that successful leaders in government, industry, or other fields must be highly competitive. Other people claim that in order to be successful, a leader must be willing and able to cooperate with others.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
Leadership is one of the most important factors for personality, and there are many successful leaders in the world, such as Bill Gates in Microsoft and Gandhi in India. But what factors make them successful leader? The argument states two opposite perspective of being competitive or being cooperated. And in my opinion, cooperation and competition are not mutually exclusive, and I will elaborate my perspective by the following two reasons.
Apparently, it is animal's native to race with others, and most of the time it inspires our ability to performance better if we are trying to win. To elaborate, take a famous biological experiment for example. If you stuck one monkey in a room with a bottle of wafer and a banana, it will gradually die because of lack of competition. However, if there are more than one monkeys stay in same room with same amount of food and water, they will try to fight with each other, which makes them live longer than only single monkey. Moreover, in the modern world, the leaders of chip manufacturing companies try to beat each other by developing chip against Moore's Law, which makes the technology improve significantly while the competition of trying to be the highest level in the industry.
However, cooperating and working with others is also key element of being a successful leader. In the reality, there's no perfect human being that can make everything by his or her own. What would happen if they only compete with other without cooperate? History tells us he or she will fail eventually. Take e-commerce industry for example, Amazon cannot be the most competitive e-commerce website only by its perfect product platform. It needs to develop partnership with logistic company and producer. In other word, the whole supply chain from all the industry should cooperate in same point to make the whole deliver process smoothly from upstream to downstream. In deed, cooperation can gain more benefit.
Like a coin has two sides, and the world is complex. Being a successful leader should highly competitive to the enemies and have the ability to cooperate with other people to lead to the better.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: there's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, however, if, moreover, so, while, for example, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1789.0 2235.4752809 80% => OK
No of words: 358.0 442.535393258 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99720670391 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7475372075 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 215.323595506 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.569832402235 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 575.1 704.065955056 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 56.8897461173 60.3974514979 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.1578947368 118.986275619 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8421052632 23.4991977007 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.84210526316 5.21951772744 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.35691580854 0.243740707755 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103201869314 0.0831039109588 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107979005735 0.0758088955206 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.235293244431 0.150359130593 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0699230229247 0.0667264976115 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 100.480337079 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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