People's attitudes are determined more by their immediate situation or surroundings than by society as a whole.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Attitude is the reaction people demonstrate on different situation. The statement contends that people's attitude can be influenced more by surroundings than by society. In my perspective, I think attitude can be determined by both immediate situation and by society based on the different circumstances.
First, people's attitude is easily affected by the surroundings. Most of the time, people like to fit in and enjoy being a good member as a group. For instance, the audiences in the rock singer's concert are all excited. Maybe they are not the fans of the singer. However, the beats, the songs and the joy in the air make the atmosphere enjoyable. Furthermore, if you have a chance to visit Japan, you will find out that the passengers on the train or bus are extremely quiet. It is not limited to the local Japanese, the visitors from all of the world are silent on the public transportation. Thus, the surroundings can directly impact to people's attitude.
Nevertheless, the society also can affect people's attitude. If the society is safe, then the citizens would be peaceful and willing to help. In contrast, if the society were full of problems, then the people would be selfish. Let's take a popular society experiment as an example, if people see a dropping wallet on the main street of a big city, what would happen? The citizens from some countries would try to find the owner of the wallet by going to police office. Because their society encourages people to be honest. On the other hand, if a society does not have justice, and the locals may secretly hide the wallet or stole cash and credit cards from it. It is certainly that the society trend would influence people's attitude.
In conclusion, from two explanations mentioned above, both surroundings and society can affect people's attitudes. People's attitude can be influenced by different cases. That is the reason why I agree half of the statement.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, then, thus, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in contrast, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 33.0505617978 42% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 58.6224719101 70% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1607.0 2235.4752809 72% => OK
No of words: 325.0 442.535393258 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94461538462 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81558469234 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 215.323595506 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.529230769231 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 502.2 704.065955056 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 23.0359550562 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.6017645219 60.3974514979 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 73.0454545455 118.986275619 61% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.7727272727 23.4991977007 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.45454545455 5.21951772744 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215858916358 0.243740707755 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0661297544106 0.0831039109588 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0509641183701 0.0758088955206 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14467913124 0.150359130593 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0457643614484 0.0667264976115 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 14.1392134831 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 48.8420337079 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 12.1743820225 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.78 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 100.480337079 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 11.8971910112 46% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 11.2143820225 68% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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