Some people believe that citizens can most benefit their communities by contributing time
and resources to volunteer efforts (e.g., town cleanups, youth sports leagues, food and
clothing drives). Others believe that a community is better served when most of its citizens
engage in the political process necessary to select the community leaders most likely to
establish fair policies and initiate effective programs.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own
position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and
supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
The topic presented is complex and controversial. Although some people believe that a community can benefit most when people contribute to the society by volunteering, another viewpoint is that a community can progress better if the same people actively participate in the electoral process which elects the individuals who are responsible to run effective programs for the betterment of the society. Both perspectives on the issue are valid, but overall, the advantages of a collective volunteer effort of the entire oragnisation outweighs the disadvantages.
Firstly, volunteer work enables all the citizens of the community to be a part of the process for smooth runnning of the community. Volunteering instills a feeling of giving back to the society. Let us consider the example of, if a community has decided to conduct weekly cleaning by sessions, it will propel all the citizens of the community to move towards a common goal. This helps reduce the burden of the cleaning the town on a handful of people. As a result, citizens themselves abstein from littering the streets as it is them who will clean it eventuallly.
Secondly, the overall burden on a few selective individual can be reduced by having a collective effort to resolve some of the common issues of the society. To illustrate, if responsibilities for some of the activities are shouldered by the citizens, then the elected officials can be left with more time to work towards the betterment of the society in other areas of need.Thereby, advancing the society to achieve the other important goals.
On the contrary, some might argue it is better to have designated people to run the initiatives of the community. As there are designated people assigned, those people are compelled to complete their tasks thereby resulting in achieving the goals of the community. However, the burden of such designated individuals can be reduced by volunteer efforts.Thereby, propelling the designated individuals towards for grave issues.
While the issue of volunteer work as opposed to designated individuals running the programs must be carefully considered. The benefits of volunteer work simply cannot be overlooked, thereby providing ample support to my contention that volunteer work will help achieve the common community goals.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, still, then, while, as a result, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 14.8657303371 13% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 33.0505617978 42% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1953.0 2235.4752809 87% => OK
No of words: 364.0 442.535393258 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.36538461538 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1225570091 2.79657885939 112% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 215.323595506 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.491758241758 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 628.2 704.065955056 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 76.1635666765 60.3974514979 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.2 118.986275619 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2666666667 23.4991977007 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 5.21951772744 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261661930456 0.243740707755 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.07517163274 0.0831039109588 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0727266259241 0.0758088955206 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140852848967 0.150359130593 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0813515685615 0.0667264976115 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 14.1392134831 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.8420337079 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.1639044944 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.38706741573 110% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 100.480337079 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 11.8971910112 134% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.7820224719 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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