Some people believe that government funding of the arts is necessary to ensure that the arts can flourish and be available to all people. Others believe that government funding of the arts threatens the integrity of the arts.
Leaders, economists, artists and scientists have to make decisions about their country every single day to improve the nation's circumstances. But it requires great knowledge and understanding on the keystones of not only their society but also other societies to have effective choices. At this point, the perspectives on how to find the correct and important characteristics of a society play influential role. One of them is to choose a population sample to examine the characteristics but this idea leads authorities to two main different ways. Some thinks that population sample must be the people in the rural side while others think major cities must be investigated for the purpose. Looking closely to major cities and how they affect the country in the developed ages, I believe that nation's culture are created, improved and preserved in the major cities. So, to have an understanding of most important characteristics of a society, one must study the major cities.To begin with, art is the reflection of the society and its feelings. Through the history, it is evident that art is used to tell the stories about people and their way of living. So that, while studying the society, it has a chance to improve it by pointing out the main lackings or successes. Most of the time, authorities driving the society cannot stand that art is telling about the truth since they lose power or profit. For example, Banksy is a well known grafitte artist around the world. When he travels, he paints about the governments' corruptions, selfishness and mistakes. In some countries in Europe, he is charged with stirring up the communities and creating false accusations to governments. This hostile behavior through Banksy is a good example to what happens when art is supported by the governments. To cover up their wrongs and corruptions, governments would channel the art in their own way by paying the artists, which causes to break the art's integrity.
Secondly, let's say that governments are ideal and very supportive to art to burgeon. Here the problem is endengered by the artists' behavior. It is a known fact that artists cannot earn money to have a wealthy life like people in other professions. It has always been the reason why artists are very successful at expressing the most human feelings. Since it is not a profitable profession, only the people, who have intense feelings and motivation to express humans, become artists. If governments decide to support them, it becomes an easy profession to earn money. For instance, engineers producing electronics have a standard to create those products for profit. Thus they always do the same product in the factory. Moreover, they do not make extreme changes because it could cause to lose their jobs and earnings. Just like this, art can become a factory, which artists producing the similar products to be paid by the government. In the end, art loses its meaning s and beauty.
On the contrary, many people complaints about the difficulties to reach the art. They support governments to fund art to make it available for all part of the societies. Remarkable art pieces like Guernica and The Sistine Chapel ceiling were funded by governments and veracious at the same time. While they were seen by many people in years, they do not fail to impress people. It is true that if government did not support these art pieces, we could not have them. The missing part here is it was in the past. Nowadays, earth is connected more than ever and art is being supported by strong private companies. For example, Google funded the galleries to exhibit their pieces on the Internet for free. Moreover, Since art is paid from many companies and people, the truthness is still provided.
In conclusion, art is flourishing by the supports of many donations by independent parts of the society. Having extra help by the government limits the arts' ability to express true emotions in two ways. First, it gives power to control the art. Second, it disturbs the artists' motivation for art.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, it is true, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 58.6224719101 121% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2418.0 2235.4752809 108% => OK
No of words: 495.0 442.535393258 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88484848485 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71684168287 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68674261115 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 215.323595506 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523232323232 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 729.0 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.2370786517 153% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.2952409203 60.3974514979 45% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 78.0 118.986275619 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9677419355 23.4991977007 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.70967741935 5.21951772744 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 10.2758426966 204% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.322106459679 0.243740707755 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0798441787517 0.0831039109588 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0716175071707 0.0758088955206 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200637931366 0.150359130593 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0722199283101 0.0667264976115 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 14.1392134831 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 48.8420337079 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 12.1743820225 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 100.480337079 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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