Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
Authorities mostly decide on a formal education to apply in all schools to provide the same opportunities for every student. Indisputably, having the strict curriculum sometimes discourage students from dreaming and enlarging the horizons. Nevertheles, this well known fact helped to shape the formal education, which now has elective courses, science fairs and student projects. Using the interactive opportunities, formal education unleashes students' minds.
To begin with, formal education have a lot of information on variety of subjects. Students' are able to reach historical strategies, scientific discoveries and important pieces of literature. While they learn already discovered truths, they also embrace the experiences on how things are discovered. After comprehending the universal knowledge, they are able to build upon these facts and discover the unknown. For instance, the genius of 20th century, Albert Einstein studied his his high school, undergraduate and even graduate degrees. However, formal education did not limit him and discovered theory of relativity, which was not even thought before. Another genius, Richard Feynmen, who discovered the quantum electromechanics, studied his gradute degree in Princeton. The backgrounds of two geniuses were based on the facts in schools. If they did not proceeded through formal education, they would not be able to imagine the possibilities for the unknown and contribute.
Secondly, formal education gives children the fundamental skills in life. Analytical thinking and self improvement are keys to be independent in life and they cannot be learnt anywhere other than school. Formal education provides student science fairs, student projects and elective courses. In this way, they can learn to think analytically and improve themselves by experiencing. For example, CANSAT competition is a studen built in satellite project. Students constructs team, divide the work and build an actual can satellite to launch to sky. In this process, students learn to think, understands the lacking and strong sides of themselves, and finally leads to self improvement. Moreover, elective courses gives a chance to students for choosing subject areas they are interested. Therefore, they improves themselves in the way they desire.
On the opposite sides, the most imaginative and influential men in this century are Mark Zuckerberg, Steve Jobs and Bill Gates. They standed out in the society and made greatest things that we could not even imagine. People argue that the reason for their success is being a dropout. Actually, all of them drop the school at the undergraduate level and continued to take classes online. Even Bill Gates says that, '' I am a weird dropout, I enroll classes and study all the time. I recommend for people to stick out to the 4 years''. In addition to that, it is not logical to compare 3 unordinary dropouts to billions of failed people after dropout. Most dropouts end up being limited by the knowledge of non-dropouts.
In conclusion, formal education gives student a chance to understand the world and themselves better. Unlike the people that confound school for factories, education does not put kids' minds to certain shapes. Institutions save kids time by providing the already known things that are not given anywhere else. So that, kids can think and improve for discoveries yet to be reveal.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2863.0 2235.4752809 128% => OK
No of words: 526.0 442.535393258 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.44296577947 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78901763229 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93275276151 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 299.0 215.323595506 139% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568441064639 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 876.6 704.065955056 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 34.0 20.2370786517 168% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 23.8363073938 60.3974514979 39% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 84.2058823529 118.986275619 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.4705882353 23.4991977007 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.91176470588 5.21951772744 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.83258426966 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.102390107221 0.243740707755 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0277091950727 0.0831039109588 33% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0415887909595 0.0758088955206 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0624451767646 0.150359130593 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0287773598935 0.0667264976115 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.1392134831 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 48.8420337079 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 12.1639044944 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 151.0 100.480337079 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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