Some people believe that government funding of the arts is necessary to ensure that the arts can flourish and be available to all people. Others believe that government funding of the arts threatens the integrity of the arts.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
Arts is one of the fields of human learning which is quite different from others and its impact on mankind is enormous. From the period of monarchy to its role in independence, no one can deny the role played by great artists in history. For instance, the single gazal, "hum dekhenge" by a great poet, Faiz Ahmed Faiz, helped people of Pakistan to unite against cruel dictatorship and played a significant role in achieving democracy. But as we are progressing more toward the technological world, the importance of arts is surely deteriorating and other fields like commerce and science are becoming better options in terms of employment and opportunities. Therefore, the Government should start looking for ways to support art students as well as under-rated artists but its influence should be minimal so that the integrity of arts can be preserved.
We have talent in each and every corner of the country but these beautiful minds fail to advance in their fields, mainly because of economic issues. They are the sole bread earners of family and art being "no-so-profitable" field of income, they have to look out for a better source. For instance, In India, after the 10th Standard, every student has to choose his/her field for the future. In the present circumstances, only commerce and science are considered to be the best fields as there are better job opportunities, and art is considered to be taken if you don't get into the other two. Therefore, if the government starts encouraging students to pursue their carrier in arts by providing better job opportunities and scholarships to students, more students will be able to pursue their carrier in arts and can contribute significantly to its development.
But too much intervention can also threaten its integrity. Arts is considered to be in purest form when it is not commercialized. For instance, if an artist starts working for a political party, his work would be highly impacted by parties' ideology and it will just be a piece of marketing and elections rallies, resulting in threatening the integrity of arts. Hence, too much government influence can be harmful and work and policies should be created to safeguard the basic principles of arts.
In conclusion, the field of arts which once considered to be a privilege and had great respect, now needs government support provided that its influence should be minimal so that it does not destroy its principality.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...nd art is considered to be taken if you dont get into the other two. Therefore, if t...
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Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'in the purest'.
Suggestion: in the purest
...its integrity. Arts is considered to be in purest form when it is not commercialized. For...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, look, so, therefore, well, as to, for instance, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2058.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 404.0 442.535393258 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09405940594 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17188073071 2.79657885939 113% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519801980198 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 632.7 704.065955056 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.2497026272 60.3974514979 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.2 118.986275619 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9333333333 23.4991977007 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 5.21951772744 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265185928515 0.243740707755 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0947916305902 0.0831039109588 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0675659149256 0.0758088955206 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17111827005 0.150359130593 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0262874707003 0.0667264976115 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 14.1392134831 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 100.480337079 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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