Some people believe that government funding of the arts is necessary to ensure that the arts can flourish and be available to all people Others believe that government funding of the arts threatens the integrity of the arts Write a response in which you

The art has been with the humankind since the beginning of the history. The existence of the art is closely dependent on the fundings because of the economics that we have built up. Some argue that the governmental expenditures would clearly provide continuous amount of money that allows the art to be sustainable. Since the government are one of the most reliable sources of money, the resources required for making art to be resistant to the changes, and pervasive for all people will be guarenteed with the help of funding from the leaders who are dealing with the management of societies. However, the freedom of the artists would be put in a danger, which will destroy the creativity and the productivity vital for art. Therefore, in the long term there won't be such a thing called art that need to be sustained if the main source of money is government.
To begin with, in a byzantine economic structure, all parties prioritize their own benefits to be able to survive in the crucial competition. The governments are no exception for this. Interests of all of the governments can be specified as protecting the profits and not losing the leading position. Therefore, any investments done by the governments accomplished by considering these fundemental interests. For instance, the governments spend huge amount of money to improve the road network in order to be able to gain more tax from the roads, and fetch more residents to get more vote. When it comes to the art, the governments consider it as a tool for advertisement, which enables them to get more votes by providing them a chance to present their ideologies. From mundane to the profound, all of the governments try to use the art as a way of propaganda. For instance, the SSCB leaders invested a lot money on filming industry to compete with the Hollywood located at the US by putting strict rules to the film-makers. The directors and the investors had to represent the sociologist ideology in their films to be able to get money and survive in the country. However, at some point many film-makers went out from the country because of lack of freedom. They wanted to make films related to their own thoughts instead of ideologies imposed by the government. That is not to say that the art needs only freedom to exist. Instead, the financial factors determined by the socio-economic structure are crucial for all of the individuals. However, reaching monetary resources from government shouldn't be a choice for artists since the intentions of the leaders will destroy the idea of art which is highly personal.
At the same time, it can be argued that the market conditions can't be constructed without any help from the government as it stands for continuous source of prestige. For example, the film industry existed in Turkey continue to produce new films with the help of huge amount of investments of the ministries. The brand power of the government is so high that any other investors that put money on film production can not make profits since the movies funded by the ministry of the culture highly dominate the market by fetching a lot of viewers. On the other hand, the prestige of the governments can be defeated in the long term. The investors who make wise choices by helping the artist to be productive instead of forcing them to represent their ideas can be able to make these changes on the market. For instance, government expenditures are so low in the US market with the help of angel investors.
Though, it seems that money provided by government is an important factor during the production of art because of the harsh economical environment, free thoughts and ideas are more valuable in the area of art. The governments have damaged the idea of art and will continue to impose their ideologies by using art a thing that can't be given to the hands of the ideologies defended by the governments.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ir ideologies by using art a thing that cant be given to the hands of the ideologies...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, therefore, for example, for instance, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.5258426966 154% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 120.0 58.6224719101 205% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3221.0 2235.4752809 144% => OK
No of words: 668.0 442.535393258 151% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82185628743 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.08386624201 4.55969084622 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82567603099 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 287.0 215.323595506 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.429640718563 0.4932671777 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1008.9 704.065955056 143% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 15.0 4.99550561798 300% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.2370786517 138% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.1091255865 60.3974514979 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.035714286 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8571428571 23.4991977007 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.10714285714 5.21951772744 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.304052502 0.243740707755 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0959939466188 0.0831039109588 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0646189494001 0.0758088955206 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.218970777613 0.150359130593 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0682361225247 0.0667264976115 102% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 144.0 100.480337079 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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