Some people believe that government funding of the arts is necessary to ensure that the arts can flourish and be available to all people. Others believe that government funding of the arts threatens the integrity of the arts.
To keep the ethos of arts and its popularity among publics, it is often proposed that governments are expected to provide monetary assistance for practitioners of arts. While some opponents worried that official investments might hinder integrity fine arts. In my point of view, official assistance for artists can be both beneficial and harmful, and it is the governments’ responsibility to balance this trade-off: ideally, those artists who suffers from by poverty should receive prompt financial aids, while their right of performing independent composition should not be deprived of.
From the biographies of many famous artists, we could know that financial crisis is not uncommon during their lives: Tchaikovsky, one of the greatest Russian musician, suffered from poverty in his youth. After receiving assistance from some aristocrats in St.Petersburg, he obtained the wherewithal to compose some of his most significant masterpieces, including the 1812 Overture and the Nutcracker. On the other side of European continent, almost all Austrian musicians of the classical area, such as Mozart, Strauss and Schubert, were employed as court musicians sponsored by Austrian rulers. Without these official aids, despite their outstanding talent, those musicians were not even able to perform their compositions on instruments or orchestras.
Government fundings, if used to enhance the popularity of arts, would be very beneficial. Many European cities such as Paris, Rome and Barcelona build museums for various kinds of arts, providing people the convenience to access and get familiar with the beauty of these masterpieces. Large scale investment for arts also attracted a large group of artists, as well as young amateurs of fine arts, to settle down in these cities, thus forming many communities full of atmosphere of arts. Consequently, these towns became centres of arts and the aesthetic tastes of their residents become significantly better than those who live in cities where investments for arts are largely ignored.
On the other hand, however, as Voltaire and Rousseau emphasized during the French Revolution, under no circumstances should citizens be prevented from expressing their own thoughts, and composition, as an important approach for artists to express themselves, should keep independent as well. Under the authoritarianism of Soviet Union, Boris Pasternak, when received Nobel Prize for Literature in 1958, was forced to forgo the reward by Russian government, since his books revealed social issues in history of USSR. While his peer Russian artists who escaped from Russia before the revolution in 1917, such as Vladimir Nabokov and Serge Rachmaninoff, were able to have their compositions published and spread across the world without government censorship. If writers and musicians are forced to accept official sponsorship in exchange for insincere praise towards the rulers, the integrity of arts could hardly remain unthreatened.
By the reasoning and analysis above, governmental fundings cannot be overlooked to keep the profusion of arts. Meanwhile, if the independency and integrity of art composition are affected when governments provide sponsorship, the positive effect of these aids will be significantly undermined, or even become harmful.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 170, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...y assistance for practitioners of arts. While some opponents worried that official in...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 205, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...an, suffered from poverty in his youth. After receiving assistance from some aristocr...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 260, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Petersburg
... assistance from some aristocrats in St.Petersburg, he obtained the wherewithal to compose...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 336, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...er the authoritarianism of Soviet Union, Boris Pasternak, when received Nobel Pri...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, however, if, look, so, thus, well, while, as for, such as, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 58.6224719101 130% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2808.0 2235.4752809 126% => OK
No of words: 495.0 442.535393258 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.67272727273 5.05705443957 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71684168287 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07171700564 2.79657885939 110% => OK
Unique words: 287.0 215.323595506 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579797979798 0.4932671777 118% => OK
syllable_count: 855.9 704.065955056 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 12.0 3.10617977528 386% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.38483146067 296% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 23.0359550562 126% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.3608082486 60.3974514979 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 165.176470588 118.986275619 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.1176470588 23.4991977007 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.35294117647 5.21951772744 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203300984977 0.243740707755 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0678048521872 0.0831039109588 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0493856506484 0.0758088955206 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123721639357 0.150359130593 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0631159477275 0.0667264976115 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.8 14.1392134831 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 48.8420337079 69% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.1743820225 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.2 12.1639044944 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.21 8.38706741573 122% => OK
difficult_words: 161.0 100.480337079 160% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.2143820225 121% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.7820224719 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.