Some people believe that government officials must carry out the will of the people they serve. Others believe that officials should base their decisions on their own judgment.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
Such situations have been observed where decisions from government officials were not welcomed, specially in democracies, it becomes a part of debate wether people serving in power should be given an uper hand when creating policies or what should be the role of common people and politicians in it. The prompt suggests that government officials should carry out the will of the people they serve. I do not completely agree with this suggestion due to the following two reasons.
Firstly, an individual who aspires to become a government official, has to go through difficult training required to work for the government and reguorious testing. Such people are already accostomed to handling a situation or problem where they are put on the spot to make difficult decisions. For instance, if an individual wants to persue a career of a police inspector, they will have to go through various trainings and testing for their decision making skills. This process for hiring has been created so that anyone working in such powerfull positions is in good shape to solve very convoluted issues and come out with unique and effective solutions unbiasely. Hence, it is important that government officials are not pressurized to work and base their decisions on people they are serving.
Furthermore, a government official serves two group of people. One is the government it is working for and the other is the common citizens for whom they have been hired to serve. Whereas, governments change from time to time and that means that policies along with the method of working and tackling issues may also change over the years. A government offical is a person who has to think about serving people in the best of their capability while facing an immese pressure from different governments in democracies. Therefore, it is extremly important for an official to have a strong stand for their decisions whenever required. This involves no getting influenced by the people they are serving and not getting defeated by the pressure of influencial people.
One such instance has happened recently, that due to heavy traffic in the city of Delhi, officials had to ask people about possible solutions of the problem. This problem was not only causing issues for people commuting for office but also contributed to the increasing pollution. After various suggestions from people it had been decided that a new rule will be implemented that will allow people to travel by vehicles alternately based on the last number of their number plates. "The odd even rule" was suggested by the people, which was taken by the government officials even after they could see forthcoming issues related to it. One of those issues was the continues checking of vehicles to see, if they have correct number plates of odd days and even number plates on even days and people not able to go out for work or emergencies as they had only one vehicle with either one of the number plates. Initially it was accepted with open arms, but later on, the same people started accusing officials for implementing it without much thought. Government officials had to withdraw this rule after facing a severe backlash. Hence, the decisions that government officials take, should always be based on their own judgement because otherwise people can have influence on their decisions and it can create a situation where same people end up creating a problem as that decision was not thorougly thought out.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 236, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n an uper hand when creating policies or what should be the role of common people...
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Line 7, column 282, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ontributed to the increasing pollution. After various suggestions from people it had ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, may, so, therefore, whereas, while, as to, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 33.0505617978 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 80.0 58.6224719101 136% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2897.0 2235.4752809 130% => OK
No of words: 574.0 442.535393258 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04703832753 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89472135074 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67801997099 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 215.323595506 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.459930313589 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 900.0 704.065955056 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.3743696038 60.3974514979 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.681818182 118.986275619 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0909090909 23.4991977007 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.81818181818 5.21951772744 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.314836036373 0.243740707755 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108477810302 0.0831039109588 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0787123140659 0.0758088955206 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210250480616 0.150359130593 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0314553906894 0.0667264976115 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 14.1392134831 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 100.480337079 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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