The following recommendation was made by the president and administrative staff of Grove College, a private institution, to the college's governing committee.
"We recommend that Grove College preserve its century-old tradition of all-female education rather than admit men into its programs. It is true that a majority of faculty members voted in favor of coeducation, arguing that it would encourage more students to apply to Grove. But 80 percent of the students responding to a survey conducted by the student government wanted the school to remain all female, and over half of the alumnae who answered a separate survey also opposed coeducation. Keeping the college all female will improve morale among students and convince alumnae to keep supporting the college financially."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The president and administrative staff of Grove College suggests, that the college should remain all-female and it should not adopt co-education . This assertion has been made to maintain the financial funding from alumnae ,based on a survey conducted among students and alumnae. However, before reaching to any such conclusion, below three factors need to analysed.
Firstly, the survey conducted among faculty members shows that they are in favor of coeducation. In their perspective it will increase enrollment. A study needs to be conducted to check if this argument holds water. It needs to be analysed approximately what percentage of enrollement will increase if the college education system is changed to coeducation along with a juxtapose comparison of current enrollement and expected enrollement after the change.
Furthermore, it needs to be analysed weather results obtained from the survey conducted among students and alumnae are in sync with the students who are willing to enroll once the college opt for co-education. This comparision is essential before making this decision bacause, if the students who are willing to enroll in the future due to coeducation is much higher, then it will be beneficial for the college. As the current numbers of already enrolled students may be on the lower side leading to weak finances. Results of this survey on students willing to enroll might significantly weaken the administrative staff's argument.
Lastly, it is important to calculate what percentage of the current finacial aid is contributed by the alumne of Grove College. This analysis will impact on the decision wether the survey conducted amongst the alumane should be given as much weightage as it is currently given or not. This data of alumnae's contribution to the college financially needs to be compared with the expected increase in financial aid, by expected ballooned enrollements after adopting coeducation. If the contribution made by alumnae is lower as compared to the financial gain college receive after implementing coeducation, then it will be a clear win-win situation and the survey conducted among alumnae can be disregarded.
Although, the survey conducted by the administrative staff seems to be contributing to the argument, but before reaching to a conclusion, all the above points need to be analysed and data should be presenting (preferably in form of systematic study). Only after that we can reach to a rigid decision, otherwise it can ngatively impact college's finances.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 16 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 395 350
No. of Characters: 2086 1500
No. of Different Words: 180 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.458 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.281 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.974 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 166 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 136 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 98 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 62 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.235 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.447 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.588 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.336 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.567 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.075 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 145, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ale and it should not adopt co-education . This assertion has been made to maintai...
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Line 1, column 223, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ntain the financial funding from alumnae ,based on a survey conducted among studen...
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Line 3, column 369, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...em is changed to coeducation along with a juxtapose comparison of current enrollement and e...
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Line 5, column 413, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... it will be beneficial for the college. As the current numbers of already enrolled...
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Line 5, column 615, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'staffs'' or 'staff's'?
Suggestion: staffs'; staff's
...significantly weaken the administrative staffs argument. Lastly, it is important to...
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Line 7, column 522, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...e contribution made by alumnae is lower as compared to the financial gain college ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, lastly, may, so, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2133.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 395.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.4 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.049663532 2.78398813304 110% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.46582278481 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 680.4 705.55239521 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.2960975285 57.8364921388 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.470588235 119.503703932 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2352941176 23.324526521 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.70786347227 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129684229366 0.218282227539 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0510744975232 0.0743258471296 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0842895935337 0.0701772020484 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.096841337595 0.128457276422 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.071026502535 0.0628817314937 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.3550499002 82% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.34 12.5979740519 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 98.500998004 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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