Some people believe that increasing violence in the media is the cause of increasing violence in our society, especially among children. Others believe that children's peer groups and parental role models are a much more powerful influence on children's behavior.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented above.
hildren are known as a gift of god to the mankind. They are innocent and naive and easily tractable. When a child grows up, many factors present in his rudimentary stages have a long term influence on its life. The prompt suggests that few people believe that increasing violence in media is the main reason of increasing violence in our society, specifically among children. While others believe that children's peer groups and parental role models are much more powerful influence on children's behavior. Children are ingenuous and they believe anything which they see around them, without knowing the actual truth.
It is true, that parental role models play a huge role in children's behavior. Family's cultural background, financial status are the two biggest differentiators in children's life. If a child is born in a financially weak family, his only life goal will be to come over the indigence and live a financially stable life. On the other hand, if a child is born with a silver spoon, then he has nothing to worry about and is likely to reach greater heights in his life, as he has easy access to the required resources.
Family's cultural background plays a major role as well. Any human being is first defined by his culture, and then his achievements. This taxonomy of humans have existed for a long time and each and every culture has their own tradition. Hobbys, interests, taste of music, food, everything is dependent upon the family's cultural background. Jewish people are known for their Bar Mitzvah. Hindu Brahmins are known for their proficiency in holy rituals; Muslims are known for their Eid and many more examples co-exist.
In addition to this, the assertion suggests that peer groups also has a powerful influence on children's behavior. We, as adults, put a lot of thought while making friends. But as children, we do not think and deliberately make friends. No child wants to be left out, and thus, it can do anything for his friend's attention. An average child with a good company will always be successful, because he surrounded himself with people who helped him build himself. A super talented child with a bad company will never do anything useful because he is busy in messing around with his friends.
On the other hand, media acts as great enablers. As mentioned earlier, children believe anything and everything they see around them. They are not wise enough to comprehend and analyze the cause and effect of the situation they are witnessing. Thus, increasing violence in the media acts subliminally on children's mind, and thus chlidren start embracing the dark and violent side of themselves. Not only media, but movies which portray violence as a genre also play a huge role. Movies cast actors which are role models of children, and when an actor does something really cool, the children is overwhelmed and tries to emulate the action due to adulation.
In conclusion, the prompt posits two facts juxtaposing the influence on children and both facts are true to some extent.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Hildren
hildren are known as a gift of god to the manki...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, so, then, thus, well, while, in addition, in conclusion, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2521.0 2235.4752809 113% => OK
No of words: 508.0 442.535393258 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9625984252 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74751043592 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61281137447 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 215.323595506 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521653543307 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 769.5 704.065955056 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.2370786517 143% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.2881970277 60.3974514979 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.9310344828 118.986275619 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5172413793 23.4991977007 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.21951772744 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.372491750816 0.243740707755 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0909915158628 0.0831039109588 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.129232062145 0.0758088955206 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184566886898 0.150359130593 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.159551572637 0.0667264976115 239% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 14.1392134831 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.8420337079 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.1743820225 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.19 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 100.480337079 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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