Some people believe that increasing violence in the media is the cause of increasing violence in our society, especially among children. Others believe that children's peer groups and parental role models are a much more powerful influence on children's behavior.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented above.
The media plays a vital role in the functioning of any nation. Media conveys important information regarding almost all aspects ranging from education politics to sports, so on and so forth. The accuracy of the information and the adeptness with which it is provided, decides how well the people receive it. Media gives us information about events which we otherwise would not have known. It changes the way people look at things, it influences thoughts and sometimes action. The influence of media on daily lives of people is irrefutable. Recently there has been a debate around the reasons for increasing violence in the society especially amongst children. Some say that the increase in violence in society is a direct result of the increase in violence in the media, while some argue that behavior of children is dictated by the way they have been groomed and the peer group they have.
I do not agree that the increase in violence in the media is the cause of the violence amongst children that has been talked about. It is true that media influences the opinions and thought of individuals by the way it provides information, but although it affects opinions it does not dictate action. Although there might be an increase in violence in the media but it depends completely on an individual on how he/she processes it and what he/she chooses to do. How to act based on certain information is a choice made by the individual alone.
The increase in violence among children depends on a lot of factors. The behavior of an individual/child is accretion of all values he picks up from his/her experience. It depends on the environment that they are in. The ecosystem around the child plays a great role in shaping his/her character. For example - A child who has grown up in an environment where there are constant fights and violence among people, will think of violence as normal behavior and not as something which is wrong. On the other hand a child who has grown up in an environment where there has been no violence and every matter is solved peacefully, will definitely not get involved in violence in near future because it would seem aberrant to him/her.
"A man is known by the company he keeps" is an epigram that suits best when we talk of behavior as a human nature. The friends we choose to be with influence not only the way people look at us but also what we think and do. The same is true with children, children are easily influenced by what others do and they want to do it too. Thus a child will want to do what his/her friend does and it sub consciously affects the way he/she thinks and shapes their character when they grow up.
Thus, although the media does affect how people/children think, how they act depends on various factors ranging from the environment they have grown up to the group of friends they have. The media acts as source of information but how that information is processed by an individual what he/she extracts from it and how they choose to act upon it is subjective to the reason discussed in the above passages.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 311, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...shaping his/her character. For example - A child who has grown up in an environme...
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Line 7, column 344, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...t others do and they want to do it too. Thus a child will want to do what his/her fr...
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Line 7, column 405, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'subs'?
Suggestion: subs
...t to do what his/her friend does and it sub consciously affects the way he/she thin...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, look, regarding, so, thus, well, while, for example, by the way, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 33.0505617978 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 82.0 58.6224719101 140% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 12.9106741573 209% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2543.0 2235.4752809 114% => OK
No of words: 539.0 442.535393258 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71799628942 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81833721656 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64979940748 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 215.323595506 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.423005565863 0.4932671777 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 789.3 704.065955056 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.1638460804 60.3974514979 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.958333333 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4583333333 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.375 5.21951772744 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270725639929 0.243740707755 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0899056345639 0.0831039109588 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105114993069 0.0758088955206 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157409553905 0.150359130593 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0855713930611 0.0667264976115 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.1392134831 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 100.480337079 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 311, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...shaping his/her character. For example - A child who has grown up in an environme...
^^
Line 7, column 344, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...t others do and they want to do it too. Thus a child will want to do what his/her fr...
^^^^
Line 7, column 405, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'subs'?
Suggestion: subs
...t to do what his/her friend does and it sub consciously affects the way he/she thin...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, look, regarding, so, thus, well, while, for example, by the way, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 33.0505617978 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 82.0 58.6224719101 140% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 12.9106741573 209% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2543.0 2235.4752809 114% => OK
No of words: 539.0 442.535393258 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71799628942 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81833721656 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64979940748 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 215.323595506 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.423005565863 0.4932671777 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 789.3 704.065955056 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.1638460804 60.3974514979 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.958333333 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4583333333 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.375 5.21951772744 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270725639929 0.243740707755 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0899056345639 0.0831039109588 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105114993069 0.0758088955206 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157409553905 0.150359130593 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0855713930611 0.0667264976115 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.1392134831 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 100.480337079 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.