Some people believe it is imperative for individuals living in developed nations to reduce their energy consumption and lead a more sustainable lifestyle, given the evidence for global climate change. Others believe that such drastic lifestyle changes are unwarranted, based on the existing evidence for global climate change.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
With rising sea levels and more extreme temperatures every year, it’s hard to ignore the effects of global warming. Giant advances in technology have allowed humans to seek alternative forms of renewable energy instead of relying on fossil fuels as our only option. Carbon emissions and greenhouse gasses which are by-products of modern industrialization have caused this problem which dooms the planet. Year by year, resources diminish, there are more severe crop shortages, all due to the abuse of our environment. It’s imperative to fix the issue by adopting more sustainable practices and inform the planet’s citizens why it’s important.
More developed countries tend to use more resources, since there’s a greater demand for it due to a higher population of citizens and a necessity to sustain industry and economy. Twenty story office buildings need to inhabit thousands of employees throughout the day, keep the lights on, make sure temperature is regulated, take care of their waste, and more. Translated to a much greater scale, imagine cities across the world which support billions of citizens in need of power in order to operate. Since they are the greatest consumers of energy, it’s up to them to make the greatest impact by switching to renewable energy sources. Making the change may seem daunting, but it’s simpler than it seems.
Firstly, the adoption of solar panels have the capability to negate a city’s carbon footprint. By powering a society’s cars and buildings with renewable energy, we would effectively fix the energy consumption crisis. Building solar farms, and transitioning from gas to electric vehicles may be drastic, but a person of economic means in a developed society must participate in this migration in order to undo the effects of global warming. For others who don’t have the means, they still can make a difference by separating their compostable and recyclable materials, and purchase products made from sustainably sourced materials.
Everyone should aim to prioritize the environment by recycling, reducing litter, and lowing their carbon footprint. It’s a movement that everyone should take part in order to keep the planet we live on. It is heart breaking to see coral reefs diminish, species of wildlife disappearing; It seems as though the human race will be next on the chopping block once our environment is no longer to suitable to grow food. If the developing countries that are responsible for creating emissions don’t make a change, no matter the cost, we will lose our home.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 330, Rule ID: ECONOMIC_ECONOMICAL[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economical' (=affordable, cheap)?
Suggestion: economical
...ehicles may be drastic, but a person of economic means in a developed society must parti...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, may, so, still, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 58.6224719101 107% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2192.0 2235.4752809 98% => OK
No of words: 410.0 442.535393258 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34634146341 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94451970816 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 215.323595506 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59512195122 0.4932671777 121% => OK
syllable_count: 689.4 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.0692302132 60.3974514979 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.777777778 118.986275619 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7777777778 23.4991977007 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.55555555556 5.21951772744 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139754390512 0.243740707755 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0413491339465 0.0831039109588 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0352002115956 0.0758088955206 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0834715457496 0.150359130593 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0154942072253 0.0667264976115 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.8420337079 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.1743820225 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.1639044944 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.89 8.38706741573 118% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 100.480337079 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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