Some people believe that the most important qualities of an effective teacher are understanding and empathy. Others believe that it is more important for teachers to be rigorous and demanding in their expectations for students.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
It can be agreed unanimously that from the ancient times, teachers have played a key role in shaping the lives of students. Whether it be great sages from the ancient times in their ashrams deep in the forest or great hubs of learning like Oxford and Cambridge which has housed numerous erudites. Teaching comes in as many forms as the teachers themselves. The author states that while some people feel teachers need to be more understanding and emphatic with their pupils, others feel that they need to be rigourous and demanding in their expectations from their students. I mostly agree with the first view point for the following two reasons.
First, the most important role of the teacher has to be the guiding figure in the lives of their students. Pupils would only be motivated to listen to their teachers have to say if they see him or her as someone worth emulating. The greatest teachers in the history have always been the greatest inspiration for their followers. One great example of this would be Lord Buddha, sure he imparted the wisdom of a great religion, but the origin of his greatness was not from the knowledge he imparted but the empathy he showed to the downtrodden and the poor. He had already gained a substantial following and was one of the notable figures in the society by the time he achieved nirvana. People were inspired by his humanity and kindness, not his knowledge. One other example of this is that the global teacher award that is awarded each year to the teachers who have made a notable contribution to the field, is decided not by the amount of knowledge they imparted but the way they motivated numerous kids around the world to pick up books when they'd have rather picked up tools and gone to work.
Secondly, as the world has evolved into the age of technology in the 21st century, the role of teachers has evolved as well. The advent of internet has ensured no one would be face a dearth of sources of information should he or she wish to learn. The role of teachers now not only includes imparting the knowledge but has encompassed developing all the facets of a student's character. Now when children can easily access information on the web, I feel a teacher's role has evolved to be more of someone who students could count on to clear his or her doubts, someone who can guide them the path to their goals so that they don't get lost in the sea of information and someone who they can count on for support when they trip on the path of their dreams. In this day and age, a teacher who a student can approach without any reservations is a lot more valuable than someone who'd provide them a strict curriculum to work with.
Although I concede that teachers who are more demanding of his or her students do provide certain benefits as in they motivate their pupils into pushing their limits and working up to the expectations of their teachers. However this approach has one fallacy, it can lead to severe demotivation in students who consistently fail to perform for one reason or the other. It can easily lead a complete disinterest in the education system among this section of students. A successful teacher in my opinion is the one acts as a foundation upon which students build their dreams.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 236, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to like'
Suggestion: to like
...in the forest or great hubs of learning like Oxford and Cambridge which has housed n...
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Line 2, column 1043, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: they'd
... around the world to pick up books when theyd have rather picked up tools and gone to...
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Line 3, column 233, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wishes'.
Suggestion: wishes
...sources of information should he or she wish to learn. The role of teachers now not ...
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Line 3, column 366, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...ompassed developing all the facets of a students character. Now when children can easily...
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Line 3, column 455, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'teachers'' or 'teacher's'?
Suggestion: teachers'; teacher's
...access information on the web, I feel a teachers role has evolved to be more of someone ...
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Line 3, column 623, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...em the path to their goals so that they dont get lost in the sea of information and ...
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Line 3, column 872, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: who'd
...ons is a lot more valuable than someone whod provide them a strict curriculum to wor...
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Line 4, column 220, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
... to the expectations of their teachers. However this approach has one fallacy, it can l...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, well, while, as to, i feel, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 33.0505617978 182% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 81.0 58.6224719101 138% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2668.0 2235.4752809 119% => OK
No of words: 576.0 442.535393258 130% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63194444444 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89897948557 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53568046955 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 215.323595506 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.458333333333 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 823.5 704.065955056 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 79.2816672784 60.3974514979 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.047619048 118.986275619 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.4285714286 23.4991977007 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.19047619048 5.21951772744 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269902617417 0.243740707755 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0847054882167 0.0831039109588 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0626187178755 0.0758088955206 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176919318379 0.150359130593 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0422861864423 0.0667264976115 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 48.8420337079 125% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.87 12.1639044944 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 100.480337079 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.