Some people believe that in order to thrive, a society must put its own overall success before the well-being of its individual citizens. Others believe that the well-being of a society can only be measured by the general welfare of all its people.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
There is a saying in my locality that that translates to - "A country is neither about the highest mountains nor the most beautiful rivers but the people who live in it". Some might argue that the success of a society depends on the overall success of the society as a whole and does not depend on the success of individuals or their well being. I personally feel that it is the success of the individulas that define the success of a society for the following reasons.
Firstly, a society is of comprised of all kinds of individuals and each individual is unique in their own way. What might interest one person may not interest another person. Everyone has their own way of defining the meaning of life. Hence, it is next to impossible for a society to come together and have a common goal to acheive. For instance, let us take an example of Norht Korea. Its government has ordered every one of its citizens to strieve towards a common goal, that is, make its country the greatest in the world. They do so by adhereing to whatever their government orders them to do. However, it could very well be the case that each one of them have their own interests and their own way of defining what success means. Though they yeild to their government orders, there will be discontent among the people due to the way they are leading their lives - following the orders of their government rather following the orders of their heart. Hence, it is of utmost important for the people of a country to lead a happy and satisfying life for the happiness of a country lies in its people.
Secondly, we often hear from celebrities and politicians that for a change to take place in a country, it should start from the individuals. If everyone in the country changes for the betterment of the country, only then one can claim that the change has taken place. Likewise, a society is said to be successful only when the individuals in the society are successful in their own way. It is asinine to judge the success of the society only by looking at how successful the politicians or the celebrities are. It is alluring to judge the success of the society only by considering them but they comprise of a very small fraction of the society and their well being need to necessarily represent the well being of the remaining folks of the society. It is highly plausible that the celebrities and the politicians who represent a society are highly successful while the majority of the society is discontent or not salubrious. In such a scenario, it is not wrong to say the society is midst of privations. Therefore, it should be a priority for the goverments to make sure the well being of its citizens for the country to proper.
Nonetheless, some might argue that for a society to prosper, its own overall success is more important than the well being of the individuals. However, if we pore over the scenarios taking place around the world, one can see that the countries which consider the success of its citizens as its success are faring far better than those countries which considers its own overall success more important than the well being of its citizens.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 261, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... one can claim that the change has taken place. Likewise, a society is said to be...
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Line 6, column 598, Rule ID: COMPRISE_OF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'comprise' or 'consist of'?
Suggestion: comprise; consist of
...ciety only by considering them but they comprise of a very small fraction of the society an...
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Line 6, column 752, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... of the remaining folks of the society. It is highly plausible that the celebritie...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, likewise, look, may, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, while, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.5258426966 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 33.0505617978 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 58.6224719101 128% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2605.0 2235.4752809 117% => OK
No of words: 559.0 442.535393258 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66010733453 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86242540663 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61860688242 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.400715563506 0.4932671777 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 819.9 704.065955056 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 6.24550561798 240% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.4554647948 60.3974514979 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.260869565 118.986275619 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3043478261 23.4991977007 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.04347826087 5.21951772744 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.387141460003 0.243740707755 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116870529434 0.0831039109588 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.098353042093 0.0758088955206 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.259677796253 0.150359130593 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0707629197318 0.0667264976115 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.1392134831 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.8420337079 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.11 8.38706741573 85% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 100.480337079 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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