Some people believe that traveling to and living in numerous places increases one’s ability to relate and connect to other people. Others believe that this ability is better cultivated by living in one place and developing a deep understanding of that community.
Travel has a significant role in cultivating the one, and no one can deny the essential value which travel can add to our lives. The prompt states two of standpoints that some people see how travel is important in increasing our ability to relate to other people, and the others are not. I strongly agree with those people who believe in the crucial role of travel in our lives, and how travel contributes to adding values as well as experience in our lives for two reasons.
Firstly, let's imagine a tree, of course trees don't move and don't change its place for millions of years; thus, do you think how many ones saw that tree?, and how many different climates or weather could be exposed comparing to a bird or animals which can migrate from place to place. Of course, the answer will show a big difference between two situations. Therefore, if we applied this paradigm on two individuals; one of them never travelled or contacted with the other globe, and another one used to travelling abroad frequently. Surely, the individual who is travelling will gain plenty of knowledge as well experience as he will discover other world and will be sure that there are other people live somewhere completely differ than him. This example explains to what extent travel contributes to increasing the one's ability to contact and relate to the others who maybe differ than him.
Further, Travel is not only participates in enhancing the one's experience and making him relate to others but also shares in increasing the awareness and respect for others who are different. For example, if someone never travelled outside his place; he will not be able to understand that there are other people who believe in and has another religion. However, that person who travelled to those people countries surely has the experience and esteem to their beliefs. Such traveller people have great respect for all different cultures, races and thoughts. Travel helps in acquiring more cultures and experience in how to deal with who differ from you and even how to respect what they brace.
In conclusion, if one needs to increase his ability to connect and relate with others who differ from him, should travel to be able to see those people in their lives and will discover how they are like us and as corollary will increase and enhance his ability to contact with them as well as his homage for their difference.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, of course, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 14.8657303371 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1990.0 2235.4752809 89% => OK
No of words: 413.0 442.535393258 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81840193705 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49348828622 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.476997578692 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 635.4 704.065955056 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 23.0359550562 126% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.5707004865 60.3974514979 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.142857143 118.986275619 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.5 23.4991977007 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.64285714286 5.21951772744 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.370894130977 0.243740707755 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140213331483 0.0831039109588 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0789497459274 0.0758088955206 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.246719113053 0.150359130593 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0280468309725 0.0667264976115 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 14.1392134831 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.27 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 100.480337079 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.2143820225 121% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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