Some people believe that universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student's field of study. Others believe that universities should not force students to take any courses other than those that will help prepare them for jobs in their chosen fields.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
The author of the prompt posits two contradict viewpoints toward the students’ course schedule during their study period at the university. As mentioned, some groups of the people believe that student should oblige to take courses from the various field even irrelevant ones to their future major. On the other hand, another group feels the students should only focus on their major and select the courses related to their job. In this issue, at the two first paragraphs I will discuss these two perspectives separately, then in the last paragraph, I will mention to my attitude toward the issue.
As far as the first point of views is concerned to advocate the broad syllabus of for the university students. The considered reason for this viewpoint could be the preparation of the well-educated workforce for the future. Since the majority of the current vacations are interdisciplinary courses which links the various types of the job together. According to the noteworthy refreshingly intelligible statics released by recent statistical research conducted in our university METU, the sixty percent of the scientific works at the future decade will cover at least the two fundamental courses to be responsible for the scientific processes at the future. According to this statistic, the requirement of the well-educated student who possesses the knowledge over the various fields simultaneously will be a proper candidate for this kind of job. Consequently, depending on the one course for the preparation of the students could not be effective for this kind of jobs.
On the other hand, another group argues that the student should deepen their knowledge on the specific field instead of the broader the variety. The reason could be the tough schedule for the students. Since during the 4 years, they ask to cover the huge list of the courses which are an arduous task, and if this task does not relate to their future work, all those effort and time will be useless.
I should say that my attitude largely concurs with the first group. First of all, from my point of view, the reasons for which the first group relies on to support their opinion are sensible and plausible. Secondly, besides the assumed reason in the first paragraph, the multi-perspective personality is more important of the preparation for the future job. From my perspective, the workers’ personality is as effective as the ability and skill for the job. Indeed, as the person is focused on the solely one topic gained the one-direction personality and suffer the lots of shortage of at another perspective. However, the multi-direction person has this ability to show his or her best function in various fields. And this attitude is achievable by the various courses he or she attended. For instance, I believe that every engineering or medicine student should take at least one or two courses in the field of art to get an artistic view. In this case, that person during his or her real working situation will have an extra outlook toward the issue which is beyond his or her mechanical and medical perspective; which could be considered as the advantage for him or her.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 225, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...well-educated workforce for the future. Since the majority of the current vacations a...
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Line 4, column 362, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this effort' or 'those efforts'?
Suggestion: this effort; those efforts
...es not relate to their future work, all those effort and time will be useless. I should sa...
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Line 5, column 1182, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...idered as the advantage for him or her.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, consequently, first, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, well, at least, for instance, kind of, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 33.0505617978 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2641.0 2235.4752809 118% => OK
No of words: 524.0 442.535393258 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04007633588 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7844588288 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88082933218 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 215.323595506 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.459923664122 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 819.9 704.065955056 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.38483146067 274% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.5199372131 60.3974514979 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.045454545 118.986275619 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8181818182 23.4991977007 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.68181818182 5.21951772744 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219354625551 0.243740707755 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.072016898283 0.0831039109588 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.086704884206 0.0758088955206 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152101600218 0.150359130593 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0651318542587 0.0667264976115 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 100.480337079 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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